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My Lonely Tramp

It's just a start, i haven't thought of anything else yet...



There's a gleam in your eye only she can see
It's a gleam that you know you don't get from me
There's a girl down the street
selling sex for cheap
It's a scar in your eye only i can see.

It's about my friend rachel, she always gets the guy. But she is totally wrong for them. She is kind of a tramp, but she is a good friend as long as guys aren't involved. It's just you know she doesn't get them for the right reason....but i used to love her dearly.


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Written August 6th, 2004

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  • CyanideKiss
    August 10, 2004
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    Just like everyone else has told you, I like it. I think we can use it. Add to it, okay? Bye.


  • I Could Care Less
    August 8, 2004
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    dang awsome job.. i love ur work.. keep up the awsome and good work..


  • the-lost-one
    August 6, 2004
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    This is great...it';s going to become an awesome song.
    Amazing job, keep it up!