Bulging weights, hanging heavy;
Dragging limbs, to the ground;
Seeking to break .
Creatures, resting in the bosom;
Gaining strength, from life forces;
Nesting and producing young.
Feet, which stand upon the earth's
great surface; Intermingle, with it's soil.
Absorbing riches, to sustain.
Blossoming forth, perfumed abundance;
In display, to the world.
Standing proud, with arms ever open.
Author notes
Sitting here looking from my window I see..............
Written August 6th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Nature with a difference (Contest) by PeaceChain.
300 points, ended August 16, 2004, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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This makes me so hungry.
Oh, this is nice. When I was a teenager, every day during the summer, I would walk with my brother to the lake to go swimming, and we ate green apples along the way. They taste so much better when they're right off the tree.
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I remember "Scrumping" Apples, many moons ago
Such fun to climb and take a few, then charge around eating sour half ripe fruit
Ah, happy memories 
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We are blessed, we have mountains at the rear of us and orchards leading onto the sea, so plenty to write about
Thank you for your kind words, 
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I feel like an apple now
Apple trees are really nice, some look may look small and fragile, but the green (I say green because that is the one we have here in the backyard) fruits show how powerful the trees are.
You do have a lovely view looking through your window
Thanks again and good luck!
Mari
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I think I wrote it as I saw it, without the blooms
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Nice exploration... it's interesting that you start with the tips of the tree- which are reaching back to the earth, before moving into the fruit and the heart of the tree and then the roots - then finally the product, the blossom, the over view.
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Thank you pozo, I appreciate it
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A wonderful poem, I liked it a lot Great poem- keep it up
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Thank you Nature is such a good teacher, we need to understand the ways of it to live a gentler life Thank you for your kind words
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Sweet
It's such a lovely, gentle poem. I like the concept of "arms ever open," which I think could be a metaphor for the way we as humans are expected to carry out our lives. Very nice. -
I am delighted that you enjoyed the poem thank you so much for your kind words
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Yay! Did I ever tell you that I'm practically a 'tree-hugger?' lol...this poem was GREAT, GREAT,GREAT! I don't think anyone appreciates trees as much as they should! I mean, without them, we wouldn't have fresh air or apples or peaches or pears...mmm-mmm! So you see, I'm very glad you wrote a poem about trees...they really deserve this appreciation, this wonderful ode to them that you have created! Keep it up! You're an excellent writer!
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Thank you, our trees have a few apples this year but not many
bad season...... Thank you for the kind words
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Thank you so much for the nice review
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Thank you ub and thanks for your kind words
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Thank you
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Aw Sunrise, you do make me smile Thank you for your kind words
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Thank you for your kind words
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Yes you are perfectly right, the blossoms do come first Thank you for you review
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climbability thats a nice word , have to remember it Glad you enjoyed it
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Thank you I am glad you enjoyed it .
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Thank you
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Thank you Angela I am glad you enjoyed it
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being as how it is almost time for the apple harvest, i could smell the apples in the air in this piece. and the way you describe the branches reaching out was loverly...
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Great work. The imagery was perfect, i could really visualize the apple tree. Very original and a great entry. I love nature and this was a beautiful poem about it. Good luck in the contest. Well done.
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Oh, hey...i really like this. It is not the same old same old...has a very fresh...almost abstract...yet not...kind of feel to it (if that makes any sense at all! lol)
This allowed me to really visualize the scene you tried to reproduce with words...and the picture was quite lovely! I really liked this one a lot! The best of luck in the contest with your entry.
UB
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wonderful
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soooo much imagery!great work!this truly deserves to win !good luck to you this a nature poem with a little twist of meaning~great!keep up the outstanding work!
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How lovely! I liked how you were so informative and how you used the immagery. I could see the scene in my mind. What a beautiful nature poem!!
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great write!
I could picture the tree. It was beautiful! The only thing is...Don't the blossums come before the apples, yet in this poem, the apples are in the first stanza, and then there are blossums? Anyway, very descriptive. -
Yep, you have done a good job describing an apple tree. I like apples, but I have to say, apple trees, except when blossoming, are some of the ugliest trees around. They are nearly impossible to climb, too. The climbability of a tree is a very important attribute to me. But, dang, I really do like apples. So I guess apple trees are just peachy. Or ... hmmm. Maybe a different word would be better.
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Beautiful
This is a wonderful piece. The apple tree you wrote about was very well described, and had a sense of well-being and peace. It showed the beauty of nature and how those around it are affected i.e. the birds. This was beautiful, thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest. Take care, Kate
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Wow, totally not what I was expecting from the title, yet you did a very good job painting a visual in my mind of nature and growth.
"creatures resting in the bosom
gaining strength from life forces."
This is really good , keep up the good work!
Yours sincerly,
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This is a lovely peice, it has painted a very clear picture in my mind, welldone and keep on writting !!
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That was nice, it shows us the beauty of nature without being pretensious or over indulgent, I enjoyed that a surprising amount, consider most nature poetry gets on my nerves. Well done good write and a very solid and intelligent structure
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aw, this painted such a pretty picture in my mind, this part touched me especially
feet which stand upon the earth's
great surface intermingle with it's soil
absorbing riches to sustain,
blossoming forth perfumed abundance
in display to the world
standing proud with arms ever open -
Lovely! What a beautiful picture, capturing notonly the life in the tree, but of the tree as well!
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excellent!
Nicely done! A tree with arms ever open, to welcome life to rest close to her bosom. A sweet thought that captures the life of a tree.
I think that trees do offer a lot to all around them, besides the shade, homes, protection, and just a place of comfort.
Well said!
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