Why do we do it, each and every time;
Take the love on offer and then decline;
Give out false illusions of adoration,
never really wanting this institution.
Using them, as we know, they use us.
Playing, with emotions true and false;
Casting deft aspersions back as lust;
Trusting, never ever wanting less
than most;
Needing, more than ever
the love the hope and trust;
Patience, is a virtue or so they say,
Perhaps, we'll find the right one
along the way;
Life, is just a message
from all above, paving ways to heaven
and so much love.
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Written August 5th, 2004
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The Idea
Is never to really feel. The master of darkness salutes you
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Not to feel is to be hollow inside...Which is worse? We need to trust, not an easy task all the same, but without trust what do we have? Thank you Bob for bringing me back to this poem ( the punctuation is awful ) 
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Love, desired and manipulated. It is the ultimate power.
Cool write!
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I had to smile at your at your comment as my hubbie's prize statement in life is " If I live to be a hundred I will never understand woman" ( as she smiles sweetly and says "Yes dear "
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One day, some genius is gonna come out with a bestseller called "The Cameleon Codes " - The adaptable codes for communication between men and women.. Listen ladies..men are in pain, all the time! Don't listen to them if they deny it - trust me.. treat them like little boys.. (try if for two weeks - money back guarantee) and you'll have him eating out of your hand. He wants to be loved and nurtured - the physical thing is cover..treat him as a 10 year old - humour him.. and the world is your oyster!
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Thank you for you review
and dont worry about the applauds, I am glad you enjoyed it
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You just keep on looking... your soul
mate is out there somewhere Thank you melissa for your kind words 
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Sweet wattle I know your are far too innocent to understand this poem, I think it is for the more confused amongst us. Just kidding
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Thank you blu3kat I am glad you enjoyed
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Your are very kind Electro pudding and I appreciate your support
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Yes I think you are right Thank you for your words .
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Thank you Sarah, I would like to take a vote to see if it is just something that woman can relate too or if men can relate
to this kind of deviousness. Bless you for your words
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I thank you for your kind words, but I think it could do with some work even if only to clarify a little........
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Thank you
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Yes the structure was dreadful, I knew what I was trying to say but couldnt quite find the correct words. I will need to edit I think Thank you for your remarks It is appreciated.
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Sorry I didnt mean to confuse people, I think it was a woman thing.........Just some words I had to put down, My apologies
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great poem i really enjoyed reading it lots of emotion and it flows well i would applaud this but it dont let me well keep writing ur very good -
Very beautifully written I'd have to agree with you on this one, in the world of betrayal, illusion and facades it's very hard to trust anyone, making it seem like the impossible to find that right person, but i too patiently wait for the right one to come along, I can't settle for less. My favourite lines are:
Why do we do it each and every time,
take the love on offer and then decline,
give out false illusions of adoration,
never really wanting this institution,
using them as we know they use us.
Keep writin', you have a gift
Melissa
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Nice write - But I'm way to sweet to understand what it is all about - thank you for sharing
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well thought out and to the point. nice job.
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firstly i want to say that you are a fantastic and diverse poet. yay! this poem is so true....there's so much of people using other people in relationships. it's heartbreaking. good poem.
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excellent
Very well expressed poem. perhaps we keep our reality away from life,our emotions hidden ,for fear of being hurt.
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This is unbelievably great and true to the point, as well. I agree with Vampress when she said "It's sad how we actually do play these games at least once in our life" Haha, yes, we do play these games...but more than once, I'm sure. I love the way you structured this poem overall. I love it when there is a bit of rhyming but not too much, although I haven't written many like that. Anyways, great job and thanks for sharing!
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It's sad how we actually do play these games at least once in our life. like theheartofme said the breaks are great because it shows how jilted we can be. That is so very true. Great job.
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i think the stanzas work fine, the breaks to me show how jilted we can be...stop start stop start...
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I like what you had to say. I could relate certainly. I'm curious why you changed rhyme schemes from each stanza? Also the breaks from 'less' to 'than' and from 'message' to 'from' interrupted the flow especially the 'less' to 'than.' Was that on purpose?
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....*blank stare*......*scratches head*....ugg!!!My head hurts after trying to rationalize any of that. There isn't any flow to it at all....every line in every stanza can be trimmed and reworded as they are one has to fight just to read them. I can't quite explain it....it is just hard to read.
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cool
Well written, I can relate to this poem alot... also, it was a nice read... like antipodi said, "We all play these games ..sadly.." we do... and it is pathetic and it gets old after a while, but I suppose while you are there you really dont notice anything... ya know? anyhow, good job! -
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Very nice. True too.
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