Reflections, staring back, hopelessly.
Gazing, at eyes that wont see;
Mirrored, complacent.
Startling beauty,cries out
despair, as she looks on;
Oblivious, unmoved.
Trepidation, fear, creeps
wantonly through the illusion,
staring back.
Unseeing, feelings of emotions
drifting as smoke; Envelops beauty.
Awareness awakes, returning the senses.
Images, flit across her mind's eye;
Of a once known beauty,
no longer, staring back.
Author notes
Reflections
Written August 5th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- A contest for your soul by -saved-.
300 points, ended August 14, 2004, 52 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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excellent write
Sadly as we age we still must face that mirror
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Thanks Bob, I cracked that mirror years ago
Glad you enjoyed the glimpse through the mirror 
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Thanks for your comments
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Hmmm... Good poem. Good job.... Got to go.... Great job, again. Keep writing, and good luck in my contest. Well, laters.
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Thank you, I am always pleased when someone actually gets something out of reading a poem.......anyone's poem It makes it all worth while.
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Really good
I love this piece. I'm generally not too big of a fan of separated verses, but you made me forget about that. It's to the point, and the choice of words is pleasing. I think I'm going to read some more of your work now. -
The punctuation is normally my stumbling block
I am glad you managed to get the true meaning from the poem, sometime it can be disappointing to read a poem , understand the words but not really grasp the meaning.Thank you for your kind words
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groovy
After reading this, I decided it must be about getting old, then I saw your comment and realised that I was right, so it must be a good poem so I can figure out what it means! I like the way its written also and the use of punctuation. Tis good work. -
Thank you . I am glad you enjoyed it
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I like it
Very, drifty, like a dream. Mirrors are always very interesting to read poems about, and you managed it very well! -
Yes we only see what we want to see not what is in our heart or soul. Thank you for your kind words, they are much appreciated
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Thank you Becky, yes you are right, so she scuttled off to change a word
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Thank you so much for your lovely words I am glad you enjoyed it
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I loved this poem, it was written beautifully. The only suggestion I might make is that you've used the word 'image' twice so maybe another word could be subsituted? Well done though, great poem overall. Becky xxx
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Lol........ I am glad you enjoyed it
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Mirrors are great deceptors because the images are all wrong, and the right is the left, and left is the right. We are not seeing our true selves. Age, and lines and wrinkles are merely signs of living. Beauty is relevant, it can only be seen by those who are on a true misson to find it. This poem speaks volumes to reflections as seen by those who have seen. Excellent reflecrtive poem. I like mirror poems as well.
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It was written as an scenario of getting older, and I applaud you for asking I also dont think you are being nosey, You dont find out unless you ask and maybe I should have made it clearer
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the way that this was written kind of struck me like flashes of an odd dream. 'tis groovy; I like that effect. Dark piece, but I like it..and I dig anything that has wantonly in it..lol
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PrEtTy CooL
Hello. I liked this poem. It was cool. But I am a little confused. What was it about? At first, I thought maybe it was about someone who sees themself as ugly, but then as I read on, it seemed that the person thought they were beautiful once but not any longer. Is it because they grew old? Is it because somebody ruined their self image? [i am just asking out of curiousity... i think your poem was great, so please don't think i am suggesting that any of these questions be answered in the poem] just being nosey i guess... =) -
Yes you are right , punctuation would not be my strong point Thank you for your help
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i really liked the words you used, but i think that maybe there are a few to many commas. maybe consider line breaks instead. i especially like the first 3 lines: "reflections staring back hopelessly...mirrored complacent.." great images!
cLouDs
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Heading......yes I suppose I was thank you for your kind words
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well thanks for sharing i think it's good and that mostly u have expressed ur self well keep writing it's good good work hope u enjoy wrting anf i hope peole comment nicely thanks again well done !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Thank you I am glad you enjoyed it
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I think this was really, really deep. i liked the words you chose to do this and i like where you were heading with this poem. Great write
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This ish a nice write. I love poems about mirrors coz everybody has a different view. Great job again, and keep it up!
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