Windghost
a lonely night's whisper
Poltergeist~
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Going to look for a better pic
Thunder boombers here in KY good night for ghosts he he
Written August 5th, 2004
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excellent
I love this one Susan. Hauntingly beautiful and ethereal. "A lonely nights whisper." This is a great line, and I wish I had written it.
LOL....
The picture is just perfect for this senryu.
etherealforu
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i love things that go bump in the night... fortunately it is usually the cat or the boys upstairs dropping something when they wander in late.
Though sometimes I wonder...
this is funa nd I love the pic you came up with...
Susan -
Very ethereal piece, Susan. Haunting image painted withing the words. Almost don't even need the picture.
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"Lonely night's whisper" I liked that. It's a prettier way to looking at those who dwell in the spiritual realm. ...Loving the picture.
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oh! scary ghosts
, that picture is going to give me nightmares now bohoho... Great senryu! I enjoyed it
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IFascinating.
It looks like a nice wind ghost. The kind I would like to meet someday. Perhaps it would share a poem. -
Dear Susan,
First of all thanks for the heap of comments you left on my latest poems. I really appreciated what you said.
This is an intriguing senryu because it seems that there are no holds barred nowadays as far as haiku or senryu form is concerned. Not only has the traditional 5/7/5 form been virtually abandoned but even symmetry is no longer required.
This is a very expressive, if creepy, senryu in 2/6/3 form
(I wonder that you left the unnecessary "a" in the middle line?)
Love and hugs, XXX Hugh.
Edited on Aug 06, 8:23 p.m. because ''. -
Very restless energy and imagery.
Great one, sis.
Hugs
Daoine -
Do you know that I've never seen a senryu before? Amazing! I loved it. As the others above me have said, it's powerfully short. I can imagine where you got the inspiration
. Those stormy nights do make for good poems such as these, and stormy or not, there's just something about rain that opens up my writing capilaries and get's me writin'!
This makes me want to try my hand at one. The second line was the perfect glue
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Another great write and I look forward to more! Keep me updated.
"Where hope ends, He begins."
Claide -
I do not care of your exact style or form. All I know is this is powerfully short. You have a rythm that is reciprocated with a pleasing ping and this is one of the more haunting pieces from you that I had the pleasure of enjoying. It is soft but at the same time sharp. Nicely done and a pleasure.
I'm so glad that you invited me here.
Love to you ,
James
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Wow this was chilling, wonderful job it was beautiful.
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Senryu, Haiku they are all the same to me, lovely and thought provoking. Yours is exquisite and i only dream of being able to make one, a tenth as beautiful . Blessings and best wishes, ~richard
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Very nice senryu sis. Glad I read it in the light of daytime. LOL Keep up the great work!
~Willow~ -
Creative
Hi Susan:
I think the picture goes very well with the theme of the Senryu. I would not have thought of and didn't expect to see Poltergeist for the last line. I expected something gentler, maybe "Casper" or something. Very creative and genuinely a nice piece. Thanks. Bill -
WOW!!! I just felt a chill. This Senryu speaks multitudes with few words. I think ghosts like any dark night and some days. You have captured those wandering souls well. Excellent in form and content!
Edited on Aug 05, 1:03 p.m. because 'Sorry I haven't visited in a while, but glad I did today!'.
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Enjoyed this, Sis! Great pic' and I like the connection you made between the sound of a howling wind and a Poltergeist. Every time something unusual happens or we hear a noise at our house now, we immediately say "Poltergeist!"
Maureen
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I had to look up senryu - a Japanese poem structurally similar to the haiku but primarily concerned with human nature. It is usually humorous or satiric. Used loosely, the term means a poem similar to the haiku that does not meet the criteria for haiku.
Honestly this one didn't thrill me as many of your poems do. But still it was a good write. You images of wind and whispers are great. 'Poltergeist' reminds me of the movie, but doesn't convey the imagery of the rest of the piece.
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I love listening to the wind, all it's different voices, some soothing, some sorta scary. This piece goes right to my soul And the picture is very good with it.. is this the original one you mentioned or the new one? anyhopw, it works great withthis piece.
Good job, Susan
love and
Dee
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Short and to the point.... powerful words and a great image.
I did love this write.
Hope everything gets better with you.
Have a great day!!!
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Hi sweetie... Iloved this one
And send some of thost thunder bumpers to Arizona Ok?
We haven't had rain or the threat at my house in much too long.
Pic and poem were perfect!
Hugs hon...
Mary ann -
Great write Susan as usual of course. But you must have sent those boomers my way for they were rumbling around here in MD too , and btw...typo in Polterg...needs to be Poltergeist instead of giest, also should be capitalised as it is " a thing or object" in german , and if one wants to have the write be perfectly grammatically correct , in german Poltergeist is definitely capitalised. I know that in haikus nothing is supposed to be , but I believe that if a foreign word is thrown in there , the language rules still should apply , might want to check with Haikumonk though
much love ,
Reenie
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kool!!
this is very interesing picture and senryu too
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Beautiful Susan, love anything about ghosts and I love the pic you have~Love~Joan;f
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that picture is great, why you want to look for a better one or was there one before that lol the wind is cool, it gets mad here sometimes being in flats, it howls at times like a howling thing howling
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Thanks Pamela Don and Mari
Error is corrected thanks for reading
All comments are appreciated
Love ya
Susan~~~
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Oh yes Susan, it is good and made me giggle.
My daughter gets very scary as the wind blows in the night and makes that ghostlike sound
Kisses and love,
Mari
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Windsghost
lonely night
whispered call
poltergeist~
three lines....
windsghost
a lonely night's whispered call
poltergeist
Something like that...... interesting write.... I like the feel and the imagery.
Don
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Windghost...i like that..i like that alot!
so this is what a Senryus is...ooooooh!
I love it! I'm a ghosty kinda person and i like the pic too..has a windghost feel to it..
that's my new word for the day..windghost..
i may write something at some point about Susan's windghost..or Blushfulmoon'a windghost..whichever strikes my fancy at the moment
thank you for posting this before my connection went pfffffffffff! lol..definately been a stormy night in ole Kentucky! I'm thinkin' even the ghosts stayed in this night
love ya much!
~Pamela
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