soft eyes shimmer; Lashed abundant.
Velvet skin, glimmering bronze;
With cloven hoof and high step.
Swiftly, as on feet of wings,
you flew across the plains;
Fearful, ever of dangers, here
and past.
Nibbles, gently at the sweetened
grass abundant, careful of all beings;
Drifting, closer, wary scents fill the air.
Startled, awareness, awakening the senses
to alert; Body language taut, as a bow,
waiting for the fatal blow.
Author notes
A portrait of a Gazelle in my minds eye.
Written August 4th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- =^..^= animal lovers!! O._.O by shootingstar101.
450 points, ended August 23, 2004, 32 entries
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hey thanks for entering an animal one this time! this one was good.. i've never read a poem about a gazelle...usually it's about the hunter, not the hunted. well good luck!
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added this one too
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Thank you, yes nature can be hard, but it is the fight of survival, sadly man is not much better as he kills for the fun of it whereas Animals only kill to survive
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Such adorable animals! I hate to see when they get caught by a predator on nature documentaries, it is so sad...
A very nice poem, the description of the gazelle is very lovely and so are the metaphors!
Thanks again for this entry and good luck in everything you do!
Mari
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blindedbygreatness
BRAVO!!!this is amazing!I love reading about African animals and such that run with the sun,and this is so well expressed!awful though,how fewer and fewer people really care about these creatures.i can see this Gazelle happily dancing and prancing about-oh please let her not to die -
Thank you Lissa for your kind words. I believe in telling it as it really is so there is no point in leaving out a large part because people are upset by what happens in the wilds. This was a mythical Gazelle, I am sure she survived
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Thank you
Yes it could be likened to a Horse , and yes nature can be cruel, but it is a fact of life
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Aw Katie you are too kind thank you
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Beautiful in your discriptions of a sleek animal such as the Gazelle. Fleeting always, This was interesting with the way you ended it. Take care, Lissa
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Thank you wildman, The strongest survive, law of nature sadly I am glad you enjoyed it though Thank you for the review.
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Thank you so much
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Very nice it had nice descriptions but I pictured it as a horse first then I saw the tittle *doh* lol. I liked it it was sweet except for the end, the end was sad. Good job.
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amazing!
eek thats horrible BLA not the write! the dying part at the end! its sad! this is a beautiful write though! i love it very much!!! i really enjoyed reading it!
much love to ya!
thanks for sharing!
keep up the good work!
KATIE -
A crisp, light view - pleasant to taste, easily pictured with your soft touched descriptions. Death always present in the real world - an accepted way of life. Good write, comfortable likeable read.
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it's beautiful...it's peaceful...calm...i really like that.
Thanks for sharing that beautiful pice and keep it up!!!
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Thank you Tina and yes, you are right it could apply to both Thank you for your kind words , it is much appreciated
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Such beautiful descriptions. I also pictured a horse too, even though this was written about a Gazelle. I am more familiar with horses, so perhaps that is why I visualized a horse. Anyway - beautiful poem. I enjoyed reading
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