You cry for me within your tomb
My lips quiver then part
I feel your body wrapped
In a hard granite shell
For you alone endure this loneliness
This barren,choking Hell
The night wind is your guide
Forever drawn to your intution
You call to me yet I can't hide
My blood,my flesh are your offerings
Of boundless passions that only you can heal
I am weak I envision rapture, lost in you
Your beath now upon my chest
Yor hand caressing me
Dark Angel of the night
Taking my innnocence
You want forever to set me free~
A breeze....my senses slowly awakening
In darkness now I scream
I stumble down those granite steps
Dark One I answer your painful cry
After all those weary nights
Upon the threshold of your tomb
My heart , my soul
Now yours alone
I no longer can cry~
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Written June 10th, 2002
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This is a very good piece. I really loved the lines
"My blood,my flesh are your offerings
Of boundless passions that only you can heal
I am weak I envision rapture, lost in you
Your beath now upon my chest
Yor hand caressing me
Dark Angel of the night
Taking my innnocence
You want forever to set me free~"
Great job! Thank you for entering and good luck.
xx Julie
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Oh, my... what a chilling write!
YIKES!!
You are a fabulous vampire poem writer! 
Really a beauty! 
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oh this siuch a very eerie yet romantic piece .....I enjoyed reading it
Gothic Angel
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Wow! This was tastefully written. One of the best vamp writes I have ever read on AP. Excellent work
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Beautiful! You are an excellent writer. Not only is your poetry wonderful, but your presentation is great too.
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I feel as if I am in a trance when reading it. It is so hard to pull away from your poetry.
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nicly written.
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I just love vampire poetry! You did a really great job on this one!!
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very intense
awesome
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don't touch it!
This was an excellent write. Nice imagery...the mood is perfect...: ) -
excellent
Aside from a few typos, not to shabby at all! 'Fangs' alot for the great write (sorry, I know; Bad pun! I'll stop now...).
~Carpe -
excellent
Very delicious. @~}~ -
excellent
I love this... Dark meets eerie romanticism that is hard to bring together in a gothic rather than goofy way. 5 star fangs for you! -
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very dark in here -
excellent
(*sharpening fangs*) ooo-la-la...pretty sharp alright!
Edited by Jaden on right now. -
excellent
Great write. Ignore the typos i can understand you. Truelly fantastic.
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P S me an obsession hummmmm Thats a first think i like it ha ha
Susan -
oh wow thanks u all
Susan -
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Dark Angelof the night -typo.
You are my new obsession! I will return to this purch and pine for gothic days to come. -
excellent
Wow.....this is quite intense!!!! It flows along like thick molasses-colored blood--shocking, frightening, yet vital. This is delicate, dark, and delicious!!! ;) -
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ooh dark and lucious -- awesome write -
excellent
I vant to drink your blood...hehe
Couple of typos up there ^ (your breath...your hand)
but I do that all the time...
Hugs...and bites...
-Eddy-
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