The towers gleamed over the calming waters
Braising the sunlight with its directions
The sound of natures calls awake her senses
As she reverently walked about the world
Seasons changing into a full circle
Completing the reality of life itself
Where one started the other ended
From birth to death, it went around again
She calmly held her essence close
As the pedals collapsed under her feet
Motionless water breaking her weight
As life swirled around her plight body
Snowcapped trees await in the distance
Golden rays of purple hues abound
She grasps her dreams once more
And takes a stand for the reality of life
I wish, I wish she whispers to the globe
As it illuminates her rose colored face
Her copper filled hair blowing in the wind
As she steps from the dream into reality
Her thoughts break from the endless night
As the mist surrounds her buttermilk skin
She know lays in a pale born room
Looking back at the Labyrinth of a dream
Author notes
It is based off of a picture, but I no longer have a membership so you cant see it. Hope you like!
Written August 4th, 2004
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lovely write
beautiful imagery...and i adore labyrinths.
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I can't help but wonder what the picture was.
I do imagine a labyrinth filled with different seasons as time passes she wanders into each area for the appropriate season.
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Yes, vivid is what I would say to describe this!
Peace of Christ,
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This is good Jenn, I like the foreshadowing, metaphor and images/symbols. I can't believe I haven't read it before now.
She calmly held her essence close... this is the only line that didn't work for me. Not sure why. Maybe because the rest of it is so vivid and this image is rather ambiguous.
Anyway, over all a great write!
Hope to see you on the 13th
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an enticing piece on dreams and reality
sometimes I wish I could bring my dreams into my day
Tamara
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Very Good!
this sounds like the person was in a dream, though the punch line can be related to reality and nothing excites the reader than a choice of options. -
As I read this I had the feeling of traveling along with you through a carefully constructed labrynth, the imagery was wonderful and the way you worded things was quite lovely.
I have to agree with WorstIntentions that the thing that compelled me to read this was the title, Labryrinth is one of my fav. movies
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Very nicely penned. Through your eyes, your pen has sent the view. well done. It has a way of carrying the reader away.
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Not too shabby. I'm sure the picture helped it out a lot. I saw labyrinth and got all happy because that was like my favorite movie and such. But this was really well written. The imagry was just lovely. Go you!
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