between your land and my skies
i look for happiness ,
draw your face smiling
flying with birds
across blue skies ,stars and fluffy clouds
i paint pink footsteps of a lover
white jasmines
essence of love
burning flickering, cinnamon candles
&;glowing
we enter a legend
barefoot walking on glowing coal
Author notes
Written June 10th, 2002
A contest entry
- Make Me Feel by LostInThought.
250 points, ended December 22, 2003, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Very good use of imagery, I espicially liked the image of drawing your loved one's likeness with birds for the smile.
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Very beautiful write. I really enjoyed it. *Jamie* -
don't touch it!
beautiful :) -
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Amazing poem...'we enter a legend barefoot walking on fire' I loved that. -
ty webdreamer
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don't touch it!
So very vivid and beautiful mona!! -
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wow great write it's absalutly wonderful -
don't touch it!
Ah...this is wonderful. The smell of jasmine in spring is lovely. Cinnamon is a beautiful spice. Pancakes and cinnamon...icecream and cinnamon...mmmmm. Anyway, just me getting sidetracked here by the superb imagery in your beautiful poem. Lovely. -
no not offended thanks :)
Edited by mona on right now. -
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hey mona :) loved the content of this.... ahhh love how the words make me feel them as they go down :)
i liked this oodles :)
Edited by gozling on right now because 'cuz im a goose and im entitled'. -
glowing we enter a legend
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