The crying of the wind,
melts into time. Whipped into
millions of shards; Tossing and
turning; Billows screaming into the dark.
Gentle rumbles, mounting, growls deep; Growing
into full crescendo. Crashing and dying,
rumbling distant.
Flashes frightful; forking this way and that;
Ever darting,diving earthbound,
striking in it's magnitude.
Softness, caressing the soft earth.
Dampening, all it touches. Filling the
voids, refreshing all living things.
Covering, pristine silence seems to whisper
peace; Covers the sins of the world,
with a blanket.
Radiance, filters strongly; Warming, caressing
the masses. Uttering, comfort and healing,
in it's magnificence.
Author notes
Written August 3rd, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- storms... or other things... by shadowchild25.
350 points, ended November 27, 2004, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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speechless.....
Covering, pristine silence seems to whisper
peace; Covers the sins of the world,
with a blanket.
Radiance, filters strongly; Warming, caressing
the masses. Uttering, comfort and healing,
in it's magnificence.
There is true "radiance" in this poetry. I find this poem so easy to appreciate. It reminds me to be thankful for what we have all around us, if we just take a moment to let nature work its magic. There is so much in the world that is ugly right now, but the elegance of nature is something that forever remains constant. It's beauty is unparalelled. Knight70
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I thank you for taking me back to this one as it seriously needs some editing (punctuation especially)
Glad you enjoyed it 
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Thank you Gregg, it is strange how one becomes so attached to their work, that it is like rearing children
I have to say this is one of my favourites, I like to come back and read this when troubled, it has a strange calming influence on me , thank you for your very kind words and I am glad you enjoyed this 
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This was sure volcanic and a rebirth...or the beginning of the creation with the wipe-out of Chaos...can be taken on two different metaphysical levels. I really enjoyed the flow of the poem with the swaying of the -ing and -ly endings to your words. Gregg
Edited on Aug 26, 4:23 p.m. because ''. -
Thank you for re-reading this ,I have to say your advise was sound,sorry (localism
and after looking at it closer I found that it creates a better overall view, so thank you for taking the time 
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A much better use of the " ly's ". Certianly an improvment in our opinion and it feels much more easier to read and with less hang-up's. Much more desirable now that it feels congruent. Nice work.
Three thumbs up now for sure!
Your friends ,
Jaunty pill and Slaughter
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beautiful...
that...was gorgeous. You are a very talented writer...awesome imagery...it describes nature in a beautiful way...wonderful job~~
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Thank you .
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Thank you for your review It is much appreciated
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Thank you Freda your words are always welcome and your suggestions are much appreciated
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HOLY MONKEYS!!! this was so beautiful! Your writing is dripping with imagery! My favorite line is 'peace, covers the sins of the world with a blanket.' What a wonderful way to describe! I especially love how at the beginning, the mood is wild and chaotic, and in the end, all is calm. Very wonderful...no, MARVELOUS...write! I hope you keep up the excellent job, and good luck in all you do!
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I have since edited this piece, I would be grateful for your comment
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hwy cutioie, glad to see this featured..it is a lovely nature piece,,,in the one line ( softness...soft earth) I think I would try to find another word for one of thise 2...but hey i am no expert and all in all I like this very much...I can feel the different things you speak of... freda
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You are most welcome
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You are welcome. I'm glad you took the consideration....You'll have to inform me when you finally finish it up to the best of your knowledge. I think most poets just blow off when people offer an idea. It's nice to see someone took something I said to heart. Thank you.
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Thank you I am glad you enjoyed it .
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it's beautiful,really sweet write there's a good imagery, it flows well and it's well written!thanks for sharing it and keep up your great work!!
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Thank you for your very constructive review and yes I agree there were to many "ly's" will probably fiddle with it a bit
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Thank you for your review
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Thank you I am glad you enjoyed it
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Thank you so much
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We feel the wind breathing through our bones with this piece. effectively portraying the emotion of air. Wind being such a beautiful natural occurence reminding of american beauty , Where one of the characters speaks of interest of a bag blowing in the wind. This is what we got from this poem. The attraction of our eyes and senses to the rythm of life. It has a good use of flow , In places the " ly's " get a little much but nothing that stunts the reader to much into hesitation. Very visualing stark , Filled with design. A good painting.
Your friends ,
Jaunty pill and Slaughter
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I love thunderstorms except when they product tornados. The beginning seem to rush like the storm in itself. The latter half has a calmness to it. Very vivid. Exceptional piece. It flowed together very nicely. No forced parts. thanks for sharing
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This is a great poem. The Rhythm and the flow of the poem was great. You created a very vivid picture of a Thunder storm. Great Job. Keep Writing. Return The Favor? -
Aw.... thank you I enjoyed writing it
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Thank you zeek I am glad you enjoyed it
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wow, wonderful words! great poem.. I liked it.
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Good Stuff
I definitely liked this poem and agree with melphleg, it totally had a rhythm that changed throughout the whole thing, very cool. Definitely reminded me of a storm. Good stuff, I liked it a lot
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Thank you for your comments I will scrutinise it when I get the chance, but thanks for your input
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Very vivid. The words at the beginning seem to rush like the storm inself described. The latter half has a calmness to it. The only line that might have been better was the one containing "this way and that." Everything else was a vivid description. It seems there would be better words to describe the violent crashing of waves of wind tossing to and fro high and low.
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mmmm... People do daft things in storms
Thank you for your review
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a thunderstorm is a thing of beauty as long as i am not trapped in my car on an interstate where tractor trailers are still doing 90. but this poem is scenic, like a drive through a storm actually.
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