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You

Loving
Breathing
Living
Craving
Forever I'm loving, craving you
Forever I'm living, breathing too

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Written on 3rd August 2004 at 02:40 GMT

A Tyburn

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  • starving4perfection
    October 21
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    wow i definately know the feeling too!!
    so short but says alot...
    thank you for the entry and good luck!


  • Faded silver member
    December 13, 2004
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    I know this feeling. Wonderfully passionate and intense take on existance with a special someone in your life. Even comes across as a slightly volatile relationship from this.
    ~Faded


  • Destined4Sadness
    November 25, 2004
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    wow this was intense...even though it was a bit short, every word i was hanging on to...keep it up


  • rocker4me
    November 25, 2004
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    I have no clue what a tyburn is...but this was wonderful! Great Job! I loved this. Whoever you wrote this too, you should show 'em. I loved it! You did a perfect job as far as my critique is concerned.
    ~rocker4me