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Jeez, Another Rant?

 

Stay then, stew in apathy and myopia,
The selective blindness that shows you only Good News,
My fevered chicken scratches will survive your ignorance

Jump through the hoop, run over there,
Pose and show off your shiny coat,
Panting, pantomime, pandemic posturing,
Plan to can the Man who planned to can
Palestine and Panama, uh, man

Listen to old albums, to voices that are twenty years dead,
Only grateful in your head, red-stained wedding bed,
Let these worm farms thank you with tired tunes,
Phantom fires heat no more,
Black holes and nebulae

Okay, obey, don’t be gay, here, take your pay,
And watch cars go in circles for half a day,
Pretend we don’t send your best friend like a trend
To a whole other land to die facedown in bleached sand,
Understand?  Shake his hand now while you can

Perhaps I try too hard, forced rhyme is a crime,
Give me time, give me time, spray away grime,
The soot on my brow, the skill and know-how
To carve the pregnant cow, let fall the speck
From worried vein on its neck,
Across the deck, splashing car wreck:
Turn and stare, defeat the fare, ignore the glare,
The bouncing spare, breathe crinkled air,
And choke on all your fear, despair,
Laugh like unadulterated apes while the victim’s widow gapes,
Cheer and shed a tear while all those rapes
Make their way upon those Beta tapes….

And stay, in your cocooned oasis,
Your home away from reality,
Where only flashbulbs penetrate,
Where robotic arms salute the dead,
And no one disagrees with the Head.

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Written August 3rd, 2004

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  • g r e y i s m
    September 21, 2004
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    I don't feel this was forced at all...it seemed to me that you were on a rhyming roll (which is always fun)
    I enjoyed this.
    ~ Lea


  • jenneddin silver member
    August 12, 2004
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    The MOST fun I have had reading a poem in a good while.... brilliant actually

    So thank you...


  • shastadaisey123
    August 3, 2004
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    a tumoltous ride on the rant train and I am so glad I got a seat in third-box-car on the midnite train..this piece works for me in it's entireity dark, angsty, perhaps a little weird, although I do not see it that way...for me it is an energetic leap through time and the grateful dead are dead ..you are certainly very much alive and full of talent..you have earned my applause... freda


  • Victoria Pearse
    August 3, 2004
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    nah, dont think I will, when all is said and done I'd rather stay right where I am stewing in apathy and angst long past it's sell by date

    loved it, vent some more

    Victoria xxXxx


  • Meridian
    August 3, 2004
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    Interesting!

    I got a little bogged down in all this, everything I've read of yours kind of does that to me. The imagery is vivid and particularly stark in its delivery to the reader, although I'm sure that's the desired effect. The title is very appropriate, no offense but you tend to rant alot in your work. Interesting vocabulary, very expressive and forceful. The tone is quite dark but this has an interesting theme to it, keep ranting...

    ~Samantha

  • timotaius
    August 3, 2004
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    Wow. When I finished reading this I couldn't decide if there was a deep meaningful point to it or if it was just random rhyme. I suppose if I'd read other poems you have written I would have a better understanding. It gives the reader space for interpretation. It made me think, trying to reach under the surface or just take it at face value. Very good!
    ~Timotaius
    Edited on Aug 03, 10:23 because ''.


  • PurpleSky
    August 3, 2004
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    You always put so much emotion into your writes and thats what I like the most. I laughed when I saw what you used for the title but hey if we cant rant than how else should we get out our frustraitions right. Good job as always hun

  • pozo
    August 3, 2004
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    An interesting write, I liked your allusions and felt this poem was written really well. A great write- keep it up

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