One tear rolls softly down your cheek
I gently brush it aside
As time pauses momentarily inside
The tear shatters into a million droplets
It then disappears forever
that tear won't bring me back never
I can't bear to look up
See the hurt in your eyes
See the pain I put there
See the fake smile that tries
To bring back yesterday
And tell you it's not your fault
Fix the heart of yours I've broken
Say some of the words that were never spoken
I wish you'd never found me
The night I decided to go away
You held me so, so tightly
Begging me not to leave that day
But I just lay limply in your arms
As you screamed such screams of pain
I couldn't stop the grief in your heart
I found my freedom in death
But I left you alone in the dark
I didn't realise I would be
stealing your freedom to
I pass over familiar stubble
as I run my fingers down your face
The once strong, now quivering chin
I gently, softly trace
I wonder if you can
feel me here at all
My heart breaks
as another of your tears fall
Oh I'm so sorry
So, so sorry
It may mean nothing now
But I love you with such deep love
I'll love you forever
and pray you find peace in above
I catch one more tear
And whisper softly in your ear
I'll always be beside you
I'll always be somewhere near
I try to grab your hand
But I'm fading slowly away
Please remember me always
Please forgive me once some day
I gently bring my face to yours
And give you one last kiss
You're gentle touch
I'll dearly miss
I have to say goodbye
Live the life I couldn't live
Find the happiness I couldn't give
Oh please, please no longer cry
Don't begin to question why
I cannot stay, I must now leave
I'm sorry, I love you and goodbye
Author notes
option 4
I don't know where the inspiration for this one came from. It kind of just spilled out of me. Which explains why the rhyming scheme is all over the place... some of the lines don't even rhyme at all. I don't really think it's very good... so tell me what you think. It's meant to be about a girl who realises just how much damage she's left behind after she has killed herself.
Written August 2nd, 2004
A contest entry
- lover's suicide by Trueloveneverdies.
300 points, ended November 30, 2005, 23 entries
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Awww. That is really good. I'm so envious of this poem! Good luck with the contest
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You think you're writing style is unique, you should check out my poetry.....that shit is all over the place!
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this was very well done, I liked the premous of the poem and how the speaker wants his or her love to not be sad anymore...becuase he/she left them there alone. It was very nicely written but there are a few typos and such that you might want to clear up...other than that...wonderful! good job!
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I'm sorry I made you cry... and thankyou for your sweet words about my poem i really appreciate it
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Thanks for what you said about my poem... i appreciate it. Glad my words could help you a little. Suicide is never an answer... there are people out there that love you to much to lose you. i know it's hard to believe sometimes... i've been there... but it's true.
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Awww. This made me tear. It's hard to go through a suicidal phase... which is what it is if one doesn't go through it in my eyes at least. This is a very touching poem. I didn't wanna cry. I guess I shouldn't have read this poem. It was just amazing. Makes you feel everything. Like I swear I... yeah. I'm done. Just... awesome.
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Awesome!
This is an amazing poem, i believe if a suicidal girl read it she would change her mind if she knew people who loved her that much. to tell you the truth i relate to it well i was considering suicide when i got on this site and now i placed my boyfriend as the guy and i know i can't do that to him. I want to thank you.
~Ash~
ps the rhyme scheme is great the way it is keeps the poem unpredictable and interesting!
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