(Where) do I fit in?
Do I want to?
Is he...
...am I?
What if...
...we are?
...we aren’t?
Could he be...
...It?
...what they say?
Will he break my heart?
Author notes
Ahh...the beginnings of love...or just another fling?
Written August 1st, 2004
A contest entry
- give me your best by DoubleClick.
304 points, ended May 2, 2005, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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He broke my heart.
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This was really sweet, I liked the vageness, it just made me go AWWW...and think about what you must be feeling and thinking. Good job.
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So cute.
Really though. Quite simple in words and form. Not too shabby.
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my kind of style... abstract lines tied loosely together. nicely done.
elizabeth -
the thing i like about this is that its very versatile, the reader almost fills in the spots you left out. it is simply done, which is always a nice brake from the ones that need a supercomputer to crack. hope it turns out well for ya
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Very honest, and simply-done poem, with a unique format, and a fitting title. This is a easy-to-relate-to poem, which is great, a poem can be appreciated so much more if you can relate to it.
Great write.
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nicely done
wow- i really loved the style to that!!! and then the ending line tied it together perfectly!
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