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Sweet Love

In the midnight blue sun
I creep in the distant winds
Further from the grave of pain
And closer to the light of life

I seek out the heart of love
For I have found one to share
Bonding together we intertwine
Never as two, but only as one

He caresses my buttercream skin
His rough hands becoming soft
As my eyes glaze into his soul
I see our eternity and beyond

Author notes

sucks I know...but trying to get over a writers block...hope to post lots today if possible
Written August 1st, 2004

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  • SoNLuv89
    January 1, 2006
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    Very good

    This is a very good poem. I liked it a lot. I enjoy reading poems about people who are in love. I can relate.. except i'm only 14.. but hey i love him. I do hope you continue to write and wish you well with your words. Keep up the good writings!

    xoxox mandy xoxo


  • catz Moderators member
    September 4, 2005
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    No, it DOES NOT SUCK!!!! It's quite a beautiful poem, Jen. The feelings of love within each line are perfectly expressed. I've not read your work lately but I see I've missed a lot. These two I've finished reading so far tonight are fabulous.

    I've missed ya, Hon.
    Dee


  • Sherry gold member
    August 1, 2004
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    Jen,
    I think you wrote a very lovely romantic filled sweet piece, it really isn't as bad as you think it is...beautifuly done
    Hugs to you, Sherry


  • Desire gold member
    August 1, 2004
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    I love this piece and it does not suck~
    Beauty of a piece~
    Love writes are tricky for me to do and you did a magnificent job on this one
    Loved it
    and much love~Desire

  • Broken Reflection
    August 1, 2004
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    Loved it...

    This is a very emtional poem...I love it. You know how to express you feeelings well through poems. You definetely have talent. Keep up the GREAT work!

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