Standing forlorn,
on the heath,
near the headland.
She watches the grey mist roll in;
The now churning waters, once gentle and soothing;
come rushing right up to the point.
The ship it is leaving,one sob for her lost one;
It's taking her loved one away.
She cries in the stillness,so haunting so tragic;
She sits and she roue's the day .
The young man who loves her,so bravely,so caring;
Has left now to go back to sea.
He works hard and steady,
and when he is ready, comes back to the passion
and me .........
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Written July 31st, 2004
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Thank you so much for your kind comments
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It starts in a sad way and ends with a hopeful note, I too wondered about the change fromthird person to first. In a way it reminded me of the romances of olden days it has a flavour of the past in it. a sweet write.
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Thank you Jenp for your kind words No , in reply to your question, boats do not play a part in my life except to say that there are plenty here abouts
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Lol well you certainly made me smile....Glad you like Irish poets Yeats is a poet to be reckoned with
Slain!
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This is really nice. Is this true? Must be hard while your loved one is away. Nice job portraying the emotions. I'd feel the same if I saw someone I cared for leaving on a boat.
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awesome write , i just had to read it because of the title ... its awesome ... i love irish poets ;P im assuming your irish
anyways ... yeah im going to read the rest of your works
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I think the reason that I am inclined to "Space things out" is because I am a bit short sighted and it makes it an easier read for me . Just kidding Thanks for your review.
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Yes, I think it was..........
Thank you for your comments
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The style and write of this seems completely different to the other stuff I've read. It's a good write and it reads beautifully. Liked the way it ended with a certain finish. Dont like the way you space the sentences out. It may look bigger but it still takes the same amount of time to read Well done on this.
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Me, romantic? lol never
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Ms Cutie, this is really magical, calm and soft. What a romantic you are, thank you
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A really good poem which I liked a lot, a lot of emotion within it. My only criticism is that it switches from third person to first person in the last line, was this intentional? Great write
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BraVo!!!lets you step in and see the sea ...and the title fits it well.sad to let go, well expressed -
Thank you Red
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That is so kind of you to say so thank you .
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Thank you ...I am glad you enjoyed it.
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Oh I am sorry did I steal your Title?
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nice!! I love it!
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wow! this is amazing! i'm searching for a word to describe how great it is! the imagery and story itself. excellent all of it! awesome poem...absolutly wonderful! worth every comment and applaud!
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Nice, heartfelt lament. I could see the character stand by the sea saying good bye.
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oo, ish pretty. I wrote one like this. Same name too lol. I liked it, good job..ish better than mine lol.
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I suppose they have to be resiliant..... but for a young wife who's hubbie is going for the first time?.....lol thank you for your comments
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Such a pretty poem. and strong feeling too, I don't get the feeling that the woman saying goodbye is hopeless at all. You know those guys that work out at sea do work hard, but the women left behind are a pretty tough bunch, hanging in there and keeping it all together while their man is gone. Good write, thanks for sharing it! Susan
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Thank you I am glad you enjoyed it
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Lol thank you " she belts the spell check machine" you are probably right
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I am so sorry to hear that but thank you for your kindness
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Thank you Buchan
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Oh thank you , I havent read wuthering heights for many a year but where I live is a fishing village and one sometimes see the wives of the fishermen waving them off.
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good job!
wow this is pwetty! very sweet and i kan picture it ya know!
thanx for writing this... i enjoyed reading it!
much love to ya!
keep up the good work
you good at expressing your self
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this is a great poem! I love the tragedy you portrayed in it. I think you might have spelled "roue's" wrong. I think it's spelled "rues". Good job on this piece.
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i lost my love one to a plane over the atlantic. this poem i could relate to the girl in it.....*a tear*....
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excellent
Short and sweet very well done a classic touch in expression.
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It has a sutble resembelance to 'Wuthering Heights', its great though I don't know whether you have based it on that but either way, well done I liked it x
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Thank you Kate, your opinions are treasured
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Thank you for your words..... Yes I will check out some of yours
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Excellent
This is a really nice write... and even though it was sad, it did indeed bring new hope and happiness for when the man returns. The last lines were really effective... especially
"and when he is ready, comes back to the passion
and me ......... "
Nice love write. Take care, Kate
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huh, i like free verse rhyming but i havent gotton to try it yet .
The backround went along great with this poem and yah it sounded a little more sad then love....but i enjoyed anyways,
see ya later and please check out some of my work
~theshadowpoet~a.k.a. monkey
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I am sorry it brought you sadness, but also brings hope Thank you for your kind words
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I like it. It goes really well and it's a sweet poem. I think she feels second and I can relate. Really good!
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Thank you Leo, I like to change direction now and again to give my brain chance to catch up
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I like the tone of this write's message. Very subtle yet sensual and passionate. I liked the rhyme scheme too. Keep up the words.
Regards,
Leo Long
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