I whispered no
But you pushed me to the floor
I said no
But you called me a whore
I screamed NO
But you wouldn't listen
I said no
But you would give in
I whispered no
But you wouldn't stop
Author notes
This poem isn't about me being rape, its about a girl's rape story I read in a magzine while I was at the hospital a couple of weeks ago. I did try to draw from my own rape expericene(sp?)
Written July 31st, 2004
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moving, it really is.
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Nice writing style.
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sad
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I think you captured it well... I imediaty thought 'rape'.
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Short but great. At first I was thinking maybe you did get raped until I read otherwise in your comment. Just the other day I was reading a rape story and wanted to cry... It said an 11 year old got raped and had a baby, and her mom had to raise her baby for her.
So sad what this world is coming to these days...
X_Sleeping_Beauty_X
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some guys are just jerks n need to be locked up in a cell to rot!
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wow. this is an awesome poem. i love it. keep writing. i like reading.
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Wow, this is so powerful, such a powerful poem for such few words. I like the way you kinda did a circle with the way the person spoke, ie starting off with whispering, then said, then creamed,then back to said, then whispered again... Brought the tension forth very well. (I hope that made sense!) I got sexually abused as a kid, so I understand poetry like this, as I write a lot like this. I find it makes such powerful poetry. I love this!!
Amberle xoox -
i love this poem. the way you repeat i whispered no untill you screamed but then whispered again show fear and bravery and pain. your expression was great and i love the way you wrote not nessicarily the content but the expression
keep writing
kj -
wow this is good..even for such a tough subject to write on. i liked it alot...especially the end 'I whispered no..' for some reason i found it very poewerful. nice job.
Jay -
this made me feel... emotional? something like that. sent chills down my back, VERY powerful, though short (not nessesarily a bad thing). obviously couldnt say i enjoyed reading it, it was harsh and brutal, not exactly nice, but in a sense i supose i did, just because it was a very good poem that worked very well. now im wondering why exactly. i think coz your a good writer, and you really felt strongly about it. something i think always helps. i could tell you felt strongly about this, even though it was not you who experienced it. unless im wrong?
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wow... strong.. very strong.. i loved how you repated the lines "i said no" and changed some of em to whisper and screamed.. but this is truthfully wonderfull... but somewhat hard to read due to the subject.. but i could imagine myself in this persons shoes.. great job on this i like this a lot..
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Some men are PIGS!!!! I hope this is only art! It is VERY powerful! Well done! 
Tammy33
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Whoa ... if this is a true story ... I don't even know what to say. But as for the poem ... its a hurting, raw, simple, amazing and wow poem. You've drawn me speechless.
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oh my... what??? this is so mixed up and like... all I'm thinking is that you got raped and... omg... no...
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