Hold a candle, as a light
and keep letting it turn bright;
Chasing fears and demons gone,
flickers gently like a song.
Brightness growing, strong anew;
As it softly turns to you.
Holds your fears at bay tonight ,
as I gently, douse the light.
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Written July 30th, 2004
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This was one of my very early poems..it could do with a little work, but I am glad you enjoyed it 
Thank you 
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o0o0o0 This poem gave me a chill down my spine! I like it I love it! It is cool! I like how you in this poem are showing that without the light everything is scary and all! I loved it! hehe!
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It's short and sweet. Ryhme is a little forced again but its certainly one of your best... Flickers like a song makes no sense to me though...
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awwww... this is like a lullaby, a nice atmosphere, jus right to snuggle into! lol!
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I am very glad you enjoyed it. Thank you
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Beautifully and calming, definitely a lullaby I'd like to hear to help me fall asleep.
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I am glad it brought back sweet memories Thank you for the kind words
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Nice. Talk about a sweet memory wrapped up in chocolate and served on a cool night with a quilt that grandma made. MM-MM good.
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Soothing
I love reading Lullably's The first 2 lines through me off a bit because I thought it should say "Hold a candle as I light" and of course, it's going to stay bright. I just feel those 2 lines need to be reworded a bit. But there definitely is a message here and this I liked. As children, there are so many fears when we go to bed or lay there tossing and turning, worrying, etc. Oh, how I remember! Now I'm doing it with my own. Over-all....I very much enjoyed this.
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Im sorry it was a little dark, so I have illuminated it a little
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A beautiful reply........Thank you
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This is beautiful, it accualy sounds like it could be a lulliby, l can picture a mother singing this to her child. It is wonderful, your word choice was excellent, and I just got caught up in it, I didn't want it to end it was that great. Terrific job!
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Another very sweet one. I like these for children, because I love children and am still a child at heart. This gave me a nice picture of a little one being comforted by the light until he/she sleeps and then the light goes out carefully.
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snuffing the fear of the demons with a soft blow, as the weary child slips into the care of the sandman, and sails on pillows billows across the dreams of innocence. and as you leave one tiny drop of wax falls to the bed and hangs like a pearl tear for al the children without beds and homes who face demons yours will never have to bear....good poem...Artis
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effin cool
Im in a lost of words. Your words spoke really emotionally and really well. Im not a fan of rhyming poems most of the time but I love this one. Keep up the great work -
good job
This was a nice melllow read, my only comment would be the text choice was a tad too dark (or maybe is just my bad eyes) however the background was a wonderful choice and the theme of yorupoem was refreshing and interesting read as well. -
Beautiful
Very beautiful poem... very soothing, with great rhythm, really enjoyable... you can just imagine someone reading it in a very soft tone. Great job!!! Good Luck in everything!!
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This is very nice and gives a soft, soothing feeling. The rhyming is good, and I really enjoy the fact that you've managed to keep it relatively short, yet still able to project such empowering ideas of a calm environment. Overall, this poem is very smooth flowing, which is a good quality for a poem of this subject.
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XLNT
I liked this poem altogether, especially,"...holds your fears at bay...."!
Wishing you continued good luck in your writing....
Regards,
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Such a good rhyme. I was very soothing to read this. When I read it, I just softly read it in my head. If you know what I mean? Awesome though.
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This was very sweet and gave a tranquil feel to it as I was reading. You did a wonderful job on this and thanks for sharing
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excellent as always!
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it's a beautiful poem.I just like it a lot...awww
Hold a candle as a light,
and keep letting it turn bright,
GREAT, keep it up
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this is so simple and sweet! I love how well this piece flows from the beginning to the end. Great job on this piece.
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lovely poem,
ahh...beautiful flowing imagery u have here, this is much harder than just a structured flowing poem.
lovely poem, i could feel the warmth.
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you may want to change the text color it is hard to read but over all really good
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Very good. I think it shows a lot of talent to express so much in such little space. This poem is a perfect example of that. It's so sweet feeling to it. Excellent write!
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Excellent
This poem was really soothing. I loved the easy flow and rhyme, it did make the poem sound like a reassuring lullaby. Beautiful. Nice relaxing words. Take care and thanks for sharing, Kate
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I had hoped to imply that the child was asleep
sorry .
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ahh..... simply and sweet. I liked this a lot. I was getting tired of llllloooooooonnnnngggggg drawn out poems. This was so cute!!! Great job. Rock on. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~Amanda~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
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starteled me-did the light douser mean to be mean or did he/she do it as reassurance to the candle holder?
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