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Broken Trust

Faith is lost,
Hope destroyed.
Nothing left,
To fill this void.
Endless nights,
Countless tears.
No ones there,
To ease my fears.
Unheard pleas,
Muffled screams.
Nightmares now
Replace my dreams.
Total chaos,
Lost control.
No ones there,
To soothe my soul.
Love crumbles,
Into dust,
All because of
Broken Trust.

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Written July 30th, 2004

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  • SoulRelease
    April 16, 2005
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    Love Many Trust Few Living Life To The Full.

    Great work...I enjoyed reading this.. A strong sense of emotion. Well done.. -x-

    ~Karla-Marie~


  • November 30, 2004
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    This was beautiful.. I think that there is a tear in my eyes.. Great write.. I can relate..


  • Sapphire Rose
    November 20, 2004
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    Wow, this has a beauty all it's own. You have a wonderful talent and it shines brightly, though this isn't a poem that shows light. I hope you keep up the most excellentness because it's wonderful what you can do.
    ~D~


  • Aspirin Lullaby
    October 27, 2004
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    This has an amazing flow, and like afireinside00 said, your style of writing is admirable. Most of your works yanks at your heartstrings, and are easily relatable. This is no exception.

    Keep up the great job.

    -Adam


  • afireinside00
    October 27, 2004
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    i love it.

    This is one of the better poems I've read by you in my opinion. I really admire your style of writing. It isnt like many others on this site and its always good to have a different style from everyone else. I love how all your pieces get you thinking and you just have to keep reading them over and over again. That kind of thing makes you a really good writer. You'll really go far in life if you keep up the good writes!!!!!!!!!


  • Khrei
    September 25, 2004
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    Well done, this piece flowed wonderfully and the rhyme scheme made the piece read seamlessly. I know all too well the feeling of broken trust.


  • serene darkness
    August 24, 2004
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    o wow, i really really like this!! the flow was AMAZING and it was so simplicit, but wow-so so deep! i can relate so much, and i feel your pain! excellent piece, cant wait to read more of your work

    Jen

  • simple illusion
    August 21, 2004
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    this is such a great piece of writing....its very very deep


  • Glycerine
    August 15, 2004
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    Wow! I Love this. Its sad, with so much emotion. I can really say I know where you are coming from here. But, hang in there and keep writing! GREAT write!

    Shaye

  • Lucky13
    August 10, 2004
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    Great

    Very Stonf Poem With A Very Heart Felt Meaning. The Loss Of Loves Due To Another Is Well Written Here, And Stands Out In The Style Its Been Written. The Rhyme And Vocabulary Are Also A Lovely Bonus.


  • Lyrical Soul silver member
    July 30, 2004
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    Very sad piece. I felt your heart writing those words. I'm so sorry for whatever happened to cause you this sorrow. About the piece itself, awesome job. You had me on the edge of my seat.

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