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Grasp the Reality

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The Cross
~Silver~
~Black~

Behind the mask
~Death~
~Decay~

The mind
~Unknown~
~Uncaring~

You
~Dead~
~Buried~

Me
~Alone~
~Unforgiven~




~vampira~

Author notes

I have no idea
Written July 30th, 2004

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  • owlishhunter
    February 19, 2007

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    A memory, I think, of another place and another time. I congratulate you, by the way, on such an impactful write with only 19 words!


    • vampira1665 silver member
      July 19, 2008
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      OMG, I get it!!!!!

      Wow, now I see it as very sad.

      I love you

  • NeferMaatNetjer silver member
    June 14, 2005
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    hey, we are all worm food someday. weep not for my death.. yours will come soon enough...okay not that soon, but definately within the next hundred years, and in tree years, thats nothing.


  • bird-mad girl
    March 17, 2005
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    Mummy, this was great. It was so dark and sent chills up my spine. This was so haunting and just... ah, beautiful. Many hugs!

    Always and Forever,
    ~Kendal


  • firechilde
    August 2, 2004
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    ohh i liked this one....brutally honest and to the point


  • Cemetery Rose
    July 31, 2004
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    hi Mom
    so little words, yet so dramatic and powerful. I think the brevity of the words kept it flowing. A stunning write as always.


  • vampira1665 silver member
    July 30, 2004
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    I hope you are thinking i hate you. Never. I wuveeee you! I'm in ur waking hours as well, do tell.

    Hugs and bites, Lady Raven

  • Ze-nophobic
    July 30, 2004
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    Better hated than ignored.
    I wore a cross today that someone got all mad about. You are also in my waking hours now...that's scare-we! I could have gotton nasty about it, but decided not to. Very illuminating for a darkly spiritual write.


  • My Darkness
    July 30, 2004
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    interesting, i'll agree...i like this though, it's very unique and shows that you have a great mind...good job Mother..

    take care

    -Darkness-


  • Naughtygrlred
    July 30, 2004
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    hahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha, i got iot


  • Lady Patricia
    July 30, 2004
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    very interesting.
    Trish
    But then again, they all are.


  • macandrew
    July 30, 2004
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    well written

    With the loss of 3 friends in 14 months this poem brings a lot home for me. Dying is easy, living with the loss the hard part.

    Well written.
    John


  • Empathy-eyes
    July 30, 2004
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    This is a really powerful piece. The last lines were really effective:
    " Me
    ~Alone~
    ~Unforgiven~"
    I'm not sure what this piece meant, there could be a lot of interpretations. Hehe, you didn't really give the reader a clue on your author comment "I have no idea". But, I like that. Makes us think. Nice write and beautiful picture. Take care, Kate


  • iznogoud
    July 30, 2004
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    Great!

    Lots of reality grasped in so few words. Very effective!


  • -Reality-
    July 30, 2004
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    Wow, this is rad. I clicked on it cuz of the name, it called out to me saying Kami, Kami! Read meeeeeee. Haha. I'm glad I did read it . I like it. Great job, keep it up.

    Kami


  • ACHorseJumper
    July 30, 2004
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    interesting write... short simple words, yet so much is packed into them. nice job
    ~*~Ashley~*~

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