Alone
Myself
In a room
All alone
Taken hold
Doing nothing
Frozen fears
Bring me down
A place of pain
Harmful hurt
Taken hold
Me myself
A waste of time
Everything depends
On doing something
I'm doing nothing
Not even breath
Frozen fears
Ending me
Paralysis
Stop moving
Never
Again
Feeling
Author notes
Written July 29th, 2004
A contest entry
- make me forget how to breathe momentarily... by ColourmeKodak.
375 points, ended July 31, 2004, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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yeah ... u know me ... always writing about rainbows and sunshine...
.. yeah this one peice was really just me tryin to say exactly what i felt in as little segments as the emotion would go ... and also about the way even a form can tell u something of a poem... thanx for noticing
~mel -
Hey I see Mr. Happy the clown in your write up there...
. Only joking, I see you have set this write with a dreary mood. I really like how you displayed your emotion through this write so that the reader could see how you felt. Thanx for sharing and take care.
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thanx a lot ... i really appreciate ur veiw on my writing
~mel -
That is a nice poem!! I love it. The short lines work, and I'm wondering if the actual shape of the lines was deliberate because it looks like it is and adds even more. Keep writing..
~Two Feet Under~
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