I chose to follow you
Not knowing how it would end
I put my trust in you
And I let you mark me as one of yours
As the years went by
My loyalty grew
My heart dead
My conscious gone
My life yours
You controlled me
In every aspect
Except I cannot shove all the blame on you
In fact most of it was my own
I knew what I was doing
I hated them more than you will ever know
Those foul loathsome things
We know to call humans
We summoned the sands of time
And cast them aside
To blow in the wind of misery
Where my heart once lie
We destroyed their home
Killed every last one of them
First the master of the house
Then his wife
Her face showing vivid fear
Her scream echoed through my ears
I still hear it today
And do I cry for her?
Every damn day.
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Written July 29th, 2004
A contest entry
- DarkWrite Poetry Contest by .
300 points, ended August 13, 2004, 15 entries
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i like this poem alot, but you change the subject, on giving your heart to someone, or something, which is fine but...then changing it to killing humans, it's imaginary but if this thing isn't human then what is it. Just a question, maybe not an answer but that's fine. well look forward to reading more of your poetry, and keep up the good work!!
always~
shanna -
ah who cares?
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Rivetingly shocking.
rhiannon (sarah) -
wow!.....That was awesome. I didn't think it would end up like that, it was like stairs..you just climbed up (or down) to the end...and you saw something you didn't think you would see when you first started. Wow...
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I know exactly what you mean. It has beautiful imagery, and the ending is sharp and powerful.
SilentScar
(Elizabeth) -
wow!!!! i really liked this! it was a great poem, wonderfully dark! i really liked it the ending was a great slap! (if that made any sense!) great poem, loved it
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