Moonlight shines in your dark eyes
Black as the darkest night skies.
Your looks take me to a time in space
For I have come to know your face.
Your smile always melts my heart
It has right from the start.
A nose I see so straight and proud
To touch it often when I’m allowed.
Your sensual lips where passions lay
Kisses long I give you all day.
Stroking your cheeks lovingly
Touching, caressingly.
You see my darling I want you to know
I will never stop loving you so.
Author notes
Written July 29th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- heh. i dont know what to call it by Speak.
350 points, ended January 9, 2005, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
1 - 15 of 15
-
3 Stars ***
i have read this poem somewhere else.. may be you ccopied this write..
.. speak out the truth you liar liar dirty lady
lol.. just thought to jump on here silly.. lol.. tee hee.. i loved both write.. so i though i wud rather comment on both
nice write.. thanks for sharing... good work... the re-written version is better though
hugs and kisses
gives choco
take cares and have a nice time my dear friend.......... just keep it up........... your humble little friend......... .......... 
........... ............ - vic ( who else ??? )
-
I changed a word in that line, let me know what you think?
-
this is good stuff. there's one line that buggs me though because it doesn't sound right, thats 'Stroking your wonderful cheeks lovingly' because it stands out of the flow of the poem. sorry about being a scrooge, but otherwise it was tres bien!
-
This is a very sweet poem. It is short but to the point. It is hard to get so many feelings and thoughts into so small a poem but you did it very nicely.
Moonlight shines in your dark eyes
Black as the darkest night skies.
This is a very strong and beautiful beginning to a poem and I think you ended it strongly too. Great job!!
-
how pretty!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Wow, what a lucky girl!!!! I hope she knows what she has, a very talented man!!!!!!!! I loved this and I loved how it made me think of the one I hold dearest and love so much. THx for lettin me get the vibe from ths write!
-
Wow!!!This just reminds me of my girlfriend.Damn this is really good.You have a way with words and I love it.Amazing imagery luv.
~Young Pac -
This was such a sweet poem. I loved the way you expressed your love for this person, and the way you described the things you loved about him so much. The flow seemed a little choppy to me in places, but the imagery and emotion definitely over-shadow that. Overall this is a beautiful piece, I enjoyed the read. Reminds me of how I feel for my boyfriend. ^.^ Good work, keep it up. And thanks for your comments on my poem, 'Scattered.'
-Renae. -
This was a beautiful piece. I enjoyed reading it very much. Your words were not forced and you truley felt your heart!
All the love and luck in the world!
Kat -
This is beautiful Good Write and Good Luck
-
A very lovely love poem - thanks for commenting on mine...I'm sorry you can't be with your love...I moved heaven and earth (just kidding) to be with mine...but I lost something more important in the end. Anyway- I really liked this piece, it read very well and was very sweet. Good luck in the contest!
-
And they say love is blind!Great eye for detail and apt words for description.
-
such a beatiful poem. i am glad i linked here fron agazely - albert. this is just so relaxing to me. i could sit back and dream now and smile yes. thanks for the smile
-
Thank you rebel, I appreciate you saying it almost won, thank you for giving me the opportunity to enter your contest-Jennifer
-
this was an absolutely wonderful poem and it almost won but the other poems were just a smidgeon ahead. Thank you for entering my contest and I hope you have better luck in the future!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! -
Jennifer, you have written a beautiful love poem here, oh your man sounds so wonderful..the face tells you a lot about a person, I really love how you have written this, it is full of love and emotion, I can really tell you love him deeply-Sally
Adding your comment:
1 - 15 of 15
6 old applause
