Still,Quiet, Dark.......
silent apprehension
awaiting the evil he feels tonight
with my eyes staring wide wondering what's to happen
lights, quiet
the night air so still
out there someone is hurting, tormented
the psychic woders if the crystal ball will help her?
It's again one of those nights
Death, tears, agony for some tortured souls
an empty heart the killer has
like a shattered window that has no soul
Misunderstood
So he stalks the helpless women
and plans his terrror for her
The whores he thinks
soon there will be no more
The time has come to settle the score
the silky hairs , the shining smile, those hazel eyes...
will soon fade to dust
Each step closer she walks death nearer
There you are he thinks
She starts crying, pleading
but he only laughs in the chaos
as he plunges the knife in her heart
this vile thing
the killer laughs
as he walks away
Wondering planning his next atttack,
as he goes home to his wife and children
and tries to pick up the pieces and act like life is normal
While deep inside he lives in his own hell
( This is not my usual genere of writing but was reading a book about a psychic and killer thus prompting my poem)
As Ever
Susan
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Written June 6th, 2002
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Whoa there are depths to you I would never have guessed from your beautiful writes. Versatility's a great gift and you use it well. An intense and thought provoking read.
Georgia
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Oh this is sooooo good! I could feel the tension building! You really captured the killers essence so very well! I like how he returns home to try and act normal with a wife and kids, so often that is the case!!! Sounds like you like to read the same time of books I do sis! This is really an excellent dark write, so nice to see even angels have their moments!
Karen 
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Jack the Ripper...cool
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What a great work! It's twisted, well thought-out, full vivid imagery, and I could go on. -
Awesome
Oh yes~ I love to read my serial killer novels~ Give me the muse I need to write~ Great job here Susan~ Loved the visuals~ There are to many people out there who wear a mask and somewhat live a normal life~ But at night~ They are like Jack the Ripper or a Jeffrey Dahmer~ Never know~Could be a coworker or closest friend~ Many people have those skeletons in the closet~Imagery and real~
Keep these coming and can't wait to read more~
Big hugs
and much love~Desire
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Defiantely tells an all to real tale...which makes it more eerie!!
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don't touch it!
Unique...with a distinct rhyme scheme...I love the flow...There is a sense of malign brilliance to the character in this...and he really gives me the creeps, this work, all in all, gave me goosebumps...hugs, Rom -
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You have such a unique style... I usually hate rhyme but you use it in most of the poems I have read of yours and it just doesn't bother me .... great work -
excellent
i love it. it scares the &^*# out of me. but it's like you captured the mindset... -
excellent
*Peeks out from under the covers*
*sniffs* 'I'm scared!!!!' *cries*
Wow.... a very very good poem. Can really see inside the mind of the killer.... Extrememly eerie write.
~Lisa~ -
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opps...been here...another senior moment...hehe -
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hey susan great write...very psycological (i hope i spelled it write)...don't touch it
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very disturbing!
great write -
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it may not be your usual genre but it's a great piece -
excellent
You didn't see my face so you can pick me out of a lineup
did you...hehe
Hugs...Eddy
I wrote one through the eyes of the killer...think it's on
my 'homepage' link ....should you wish to gander... -
Thanks u all
i appreciate it ((((((hugs))))) back to u
Susan Maybe ididnt mess up after all ha ha -
don't touch it!
Do Not Touch It - that's the thing!!!
Great write!!
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don't touch it!
DAMN!!!,
downright dark and scary I would say, excellent write, not even what I expected at all, but it was definitely creepy,
ummmmmm can you say this is good stuff?
damn I hate t call that that,
but it really is a most excellent write,
really liked it,
joe -
don't touch it!
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oh thanks u all
Blessing never thought of a title change hmmmmmm Interesting indeed
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excellent
Engrossing story you told in this poem! You might want to change the second last line...perhaps to 'and tries to pick up the pieces of his normal life'. Just a suggestion...loved the poem!
:o) Maureen -
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Interesting. But maybe, evil soul would be a better title, or Man Eu Noir Desire, sorry...interesting write. It seems almost as if it wanted to be a story. -
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Amazing ... glad I 'discovered you. Will read more soon. My work has led me to many of these creatures and you have uncannily unmasked this one quite convincingly.
Sag -
Thanks Foretold i appreciate the comments u too Eithne and Dark
any and all welcome thanks again Blush!aka Susan! -
excellent
Insightful words that you showed. Dark from light of the norm it seems. No light with out darkness so everyone shall have this darkness about them. Even those of the most holy. Was interesting for sure. : ) -
don't touch it!
oh wow. disturbing, very twisted, but extremely good. nice write! -
don't touch it!
this is now on my fav list you should read my poem 'Murder'
its along these line just a little more...uh...
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excellent
Awesome, I enjoyed this ;)
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thanks angel a new and differnt twist for me!
Susan -
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wow great job blush! i luv it! i'ts very well put together and everything...
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Thanks Hide & nyjohn
Blessings Susan -
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very creative,,,, liked it alot -
don't touch it!
A well written piece, unusual and interesting poem.
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Thanks Barb i thought i flubbed up writng this one but from you thats enuf praise in itself Thanks my friend!
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Wow this is different for you Susan, but very good..just shows yyou never know who another person really is!!
Barbsxx
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