I am like a song
and you are the notes
on the musical scale,
defining each
beautiful tone
within me.
You are the things
in me that are sung
and unsung.
I dream to sing
in unison with you:
within a rhythmic
measure I can only
hold when
I'm meshed
with you.
I need us to vocalize
wit is to love
with one voice.
Harmonize:
hold that note
for the rest of our lives
until the end of our
music.
BY: Amy Royal
Author notes
Written July 27th, 2004
A contest entry
- AP Book Contest-- get published! by tinuelena.
900 points, ended September 19, 2007, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Good start. Play with it a bit. It's still a little cliche, particularly the beginning. Can you find a way to show us how you're the song? How he's the notes? Step out of the box and show me some abstract thinking.
Elizabeth -
I love music, you can just imagine what I do to hear one anywhere I go, my day is incomplete without it.
I love poetry, obviously, need not reiterate...lol.
I love "love" poems, always number 1 in my list.
Now, you bring this melodious symphony into this great piece.
Very well done.
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AWESOME!
Another musical allegory... ::hugs::
Beautiful!!! I am so adding you to mah favorites. ^^
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Great job, its incredible...
To Do list:
*bookmark poem
*applaud poem
boy, im booked for the night
Good job! beautiful
cheers *~*~christina -
Very pretty, I could almost feel the music flowing through my body. I love the way you describe the tones in unison, to blend toether, forming a beautiful symphony of love.
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sweet
wow, what and incredible poem. it really blew me away. the emotion in it is so raw and tangible...its awesome! i think it really portrays love and the weakness that ensues. excellent job! keep up the good work! -
No, no, no, it’s one of the two of you (more likely you yourself) who’s pulling the others heart stings and playing a sweet tune ( lol ‘twas a joke)
I love these thoughts on composing the music of love, for indeed the hearts would be amazing if they could relay the notes in time, to the actual way someone makes them feel. -
Amy -
This is a nice evocation of love - and when the melody is finally matched with the music, that is "in love". I hope you find that.
Scott -
Excellent! What a cool image. You are desire and love, but without another to experience you, to appreciate you, you are hollow wishes. I love this write.
Marcellus -
'You are the things in me that are sung and unsung' I really love that line and that's such a brilliant way to describe this feeling. And holding the notes for the rest of your lives, that's really amazing to me. I love this one.
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WOW, this is great! Very touching and beautiful. Thank you so much for sharing your words and experiences with all of us here.
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