calm silence
kisses caress my head
surprised by nature
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Purple Onions
I tried to use the technique of the metaphor in writing this.
(Haiku Techniques by Jane Reichhold.
www.ahapoetry.com/haiartjr.htm
Written July 27th, 2004
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Wow this is beautiful. It's very peaceful. Just what I needed today
I love it, you really did a great job. Thanks for sharing and keep up the great work! Best of luck in the contest and thanks for entering.
~Lana
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Thanks so much for the comment! It really made me smile ^-^ hugz
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just love the 'ku haven't written any in a very long while though .. yes nature does surprise us and i'm thankful always for the gifts .. i think you captured a moment quite well here thanks for visiting my poem house and your comments i appreciate it! peace, lisa
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Duana, this is a wonderful poem. I love short ones like this and this one is no exception. You haven't lost your touch while I have been away that is easy to see.
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nicely penned...reminds me of a storm....not the bad kind, the good kind..the kind you want to go out in and dance...great job..enjoyed!
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This is a really soothing haiku, it just gives off a powerful message of peace. Nature is a truly inspirational thing, it helps me write quite a few poems. Anyways, great write and take care, Kate
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oooh i feel the tenderness in this... it was like havinbg a gentle wave wash over me. it is GREAT!!!!! well done and good luck in the contest
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I like it. It gives a nice, peaceful feeling. Good luck!
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I think in the first line you really don't need both "calm," and "still." I think you could just say "calm silence." That would give a stronger image I think. I really like the last line. Nature surprises us in so many ways. Lovely work, thanks for entering
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Thanks for the applause surfergirl! hehe
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