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Last Year's Blossom. (tanka for Don)





last year's blossom
I thought had gone
with the migrating birds
I see now they borrowed it
for their winter home





Andrew Hide
27~07~2004

Author notes

For Don and his dissapearing blossom
Written July 27th, 2004

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  • Sai Babas Lotus
    February 4, 2005
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    Lovely!

    This is so beautiful and enjoyable. Lovely colours and so light-hearted and nice. This made me smile. It almost makes me want to be a blossom. LOL. The lower part of the tanka is out of this world! It's an excellent write. I'm sure Haikumonk will smile when he sees this

    -Charishma


  • painfully amazing
    July 29, 2004
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    wow. lovly tanka...wuts a tanka? i liked the flow. and i like how it's short and it gets right to the point. i enjoyed reading it.
    -Noor G.
    PS: please read one of mine. i'd really apreaceat it.


  • Nicolette gold member
    July 28, 2004
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    Andrew
    A lovely tanka indeed. Lovely imagery as well ( I always love anything about blossoms)! The tanka begins with a nostalgic feeling but moves to hope and insight. I am beginning to like haiku, tanka, etc. - so I can really appreciate the thought that went into this poem. Great work!
    Nicolette


  • BillS2
    July 27, 2004
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    Lovely

    Hi Andrew:
    This is a lovely and clever Tanka. As Tankas are probably my favorite form of poetry, I do appreciate your work in this one. Thank you for sharing what you have written. I'm sure Don appreciated it as well. Bill


  • July 27, 2004
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    Beautiful poem, this is the first tanka I've read and now I'll have to go and read more.

    Jenn


  • Mari Goes gold member
    July 27, 2004
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    Andrew, you've found the missing blossom! I'm sure Don will be very happy with this tanka and will not walk around repeating: blossom, blossom anymore
    Mari

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