Alone in my dark, seductive, room, I fight off the sleep
My self-esteem is low, the devil my soul can keep
And i wait for the voices of guilt in my ears
Regressed feelings from very, very young years
They tell me to cut, they tell me to hang
They whisper through many terrible, savage, yellow fangs
And the multi-headed rabid, dogs have many tongues
They claim to be legion but they are really all one
They never shout, so no one can hear
They leech off the anguish of all of my fears
I want them to go, I don't want them to stay
But i just cannot get myself to kneel and to pray
The anger it is deep, it wants to do me harm
It manages to turn off, all my body's alarms
And then there is a rush and a fountain of deep, red, blood
Just like the deluge that caused the huge flood
The staff rush in and then the blood flow is stopped
My cell is emptied and the floor is clinically mopped
I return after the stitching back to the empty room
Waiting for the voices again, in the dark of the reflective gloom.
Georges
Author notes
This poem is for all young people who cut out of guilt and anger, usually by the abuse of people they have trusted. This is a true story, I work with these young people. Option 1.
Written July 26th, 2004
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This was pretty good, but it could use a few metaphors... instead of saying something like "my self-esteem is low" you could say something else. Thank you for entering my contest.
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I can really relate to this poem as I am a self injurer...you did and amzing write here....it was so beautifully written and expressive...you are very talented and I hope to read more from you soon
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Very deep and thank you so much for the author comments telling how this was and what it was for. You understand the anger and the guilt that is flooded in blood when they cut. You have done an amazing job on this piece. Keep up the amazing work..
Dark
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this is so good, i love the imagery... well done, good luck in the contest and thanx for entering xxx
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wow, this was really good, u used so many adjectives it really made everything come alive and your emotions were so vivide. Nice job
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I love the describing words. You say its a true story? I thankyou very much for entering this. Well odne, and good luck
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Wow.. this is very amazing.. such a sad poem, I really enjoyed it. You've done a great job describing your feelings... very powerful...
Thankyou so much for entering and goodluck
Blessed Be,
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Mm. How dark and sad. So much like the thousands of others one could read around here - dark, sad, hopeless. Makes me sad for the younger ones. When will a generation of hope come? Of the courage to live the was once an inborn instict? Pretty poem, anyway. Sad, tho.
Much respect,
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Very deep
Georges.... this is a really deep and powerful write. I loved the way it flowed like a cascade of deep and dark emotions.
"And i wait for the voices of guilt in my ears
Regressed feelings from very, very young years"
Those two lines inspired me the most, as they portrayed the cutter as if they were sinking in solitude in guilt and hurtful thoughts. Anyway, I've been meaning to read some more of your work as it's so unique, you're really talented. Thanks for all my comments and encouragement. Take care, Kate
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Thanks nikki4 for your comments on my work, check out some more.
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Thanks Damaris for your comments on my poetry.
Georges -
Read more poetry at my author's page. Thanks for your comments, Destiny Denied.
Georges -
Thanks for your comments, Maatkara. I corrected the mistake. Thanks.
Georges -
Thanks for your comments on my poetry, song bird 1203.
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Thank you for your very encouraging remarks on my poetry, Tecohe.
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Thanks< Sadie for your comments on my poetry. I hope you have time to read more.
Georges -
Thank you Kat for your very nice comments, they were appreciated.
Georges -
i really like the rhyming and the backing makes it even better
great writ thanks for sharing hope u write more because i think im going to check more of ur work out because this 1 i like and i think ur next will b even better -
I really like this poem. It has good descriptive words and it all flows together very well. GREAT write! would like to hear more from you!
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piercing perception
Very insightful and empathetic piece, Georges! That is such a sad, and alarmingly common, tragedy. You have captured the mental agony in gripping, graphic images.
Well done!
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This is a great poem . i can really relate to it . Thank you for sharing it . Keep up the good work
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Awsum poem I hope to read more of your soon.You have alot of talen(as I tell many ppl)Im glad you posted on this site and glad I can here to the site so many talented ppl like you!
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great poem, it really came out well, very strong and meaningful, great job keep it up!!!
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very intersting. has a lot of felling to it
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At some point the realization that you have taken over where your abusers left off, will come. Yes, it's sad that such authentic trust is misused. But when did that happen and how old are they now? If one's wants to go deep, do it emotionally to find the places inside that need to heal. If not, it's just another way to eventually die physically.
The poem is very well done in expressing this behavior. It's one of the best on the subject that I have read on this site and there are a lot to choose from here.
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Nice poem. I dont know, the word for it could be perhaps "passionate." The rhyming was not bad but there are some places where the rhyming is a little off. When you add some s's at the end of the lines, sometimes the rhyme is thrown off a bit, but it's pretty well written over all. Good job!
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good poem. the rhyming was pretty good. the meter was good and your poem flowed together well. great write! keep it up
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This is just a wonderful piece. It is gorgeous in every aspect. I like it. Keep up the great work and thank you for sharing this great piece of work. May you have a tremendous day and God bless
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Good stuff
So much meaning and the ryhming was that bad... some people rhyme better than other's and you didn't do a have bad job of it in this piece. Excellent! -
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I really liked this alot.It was so good inclunding the wonderful flow to it,how well it was understood,even the way you wrote it.I loved everything about it and I would appluad it but it isn't working now so I cant
but when it works I'll be back 
I felt lucky to read this no lie so thanks for sharing.I want to read others soon so good job again and keep up the great work
sadie
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Awsome job Leeche! I felt that this poem was written from the heart and you got down everything you wanted to say! Awsome job and definatly keep it up!
All the love and luck in the world!
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Thanks for the encouragement, self-mentor.
Georges -
This is a great piece you have here. I like it very much so. I think you did a very good job. Keep up the good work and thank you for sharing it as well
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