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This Cold Life

In this cold life there is nothing but hate
Hate and all the things in between
Between the hard earth and lingering darkness
Darkness haunts me, breaking me down
Down to the deepest cave below
Below all that lies above is
Is hatred and pain and every one
One day it will all come clear
Clear to me and to you
You dissolve the inner stars
Stars to brighten up the outer us

Author notes

Written on 25th July 2004 at 21:08 GMT

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  • JurneesRainbow
    January 20, 2005
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    I just wanted to let you know that I really enjoyed your poem, although it did not place in this contest, I hope you will consider entering my next one.

    ~BettY~

  • QueenGuinevere
    January 7, 2005
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    I totally agree...everyone is so mad and angery all the times, I really liked this poem, nice work


  • JurneesRainbow
    January 5, 2005
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    Two thumbs, a toe, and ear hair up!

    I really like your poem. I little rough to read but the idea behind it is far out! Good luck in the contest!

    ~BettY~


  • forgot2b3forgotten
    January 5, 2005
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    I love it


  • DefinitiveFreak silver member
    October 11, 2004
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    I took it to be that he didn't read some of mine because it wasn't counted in the page views. The count was still the same as it was before I entered the contest. If he did read them, then the page counter thingy mustn't have registered it. So yeah, I'm sorry.


  • LaAmyaArlene
    October 9, 2004
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    Okay, good work. Im sorry you got so offended. He said he did read all of them, but he didnt have time to comment. Sorry, I hope you get over it.


  • illegalfairy
    August 19, 2004
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    This was really good. i loved the flow and how supurb *sp* that it was. good job and thanks for entering. good luck.


  • Andu
    July 26, 2004
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    this was great, it's got depth and it's got style. An emotional write and it's rather thought provoking too. Great write! and good luck with the contest


  • July 25, 2004
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    I LOVE this style of poetry, it flows so beautifully. You did an excellent job. The emotion was really raw and strangely haunting, in a way. Good job!


  • July 25, 2004
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    an excellent write... and out of the hate and darkness comes a gem of a poem

    billy

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