Wind whips, whistling wayward around
Stout shafts spiraling skyward from ground
About silent plains only wind’s whisper
Is heard blowing, gusts burst thicker
Falling from crest and building to rise
Hear its sound blow
Feel its rhythm flow
See its force show
Smell its fragrance aglow
Taste its dryness and know
Wind whips, roaring in March’s ides
Tossing clouds about within the skies
Natural in state its playfulness taunts
Turning to fear when October haunts
Falling from crest and building to rise
Hear its sound blow
Feel its rhythm flow
See its force show
Smell its fragrance aglow
Taste its dryness and know
Wind whips, gasping in puffs
Ragged it rages in tiny bluffs
Somberly signaling its said farewell
Its soft touch no longer to dwell
Falling from crest and building to rise
Our natural force says its final goodbyes
Author notes
A write I did for a class at AP and thought I would share it with everyone. Enjoy....
Written July 23rd, 2004
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Thank you for entering the Summer Survivor Poetry Island Competition. We are nearly done with our lists .. after reading the huge amount of poems that rolled in. Watch the Round 1 Column for the Round 2 Advancement results.
Thanks and good luck.
Cvillelisa, Desiree Darkk and Son of the Moon
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Good luck in the contest. A well chosen poem that I am glad I got to read again.
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Thank you lollylou for stopping in and reading this piece. The class here on AP that I took was excellent and this was one of the writes that I did for one of the assignments. I appreciate the grand compliment that you left in your comment, I think that being around others that have a common goal and seeing their work inspires others, so I have to give some credit to my classmates and the teacher of the basics course for putting me in the right mind-frame to create this write. I really appreciate you taking time to read this write and commenting on it. Thank you and take care.
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wow.. this is a fantastic piece. what a talent!!!! well done.. you really have rendered me speechless.. and anyone who knows me will know that is hard to do! keep up the fab work love and hugs bugs and phishes lolly x
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I am glad that you enjoyed this read, it was for a class that I was taking. The class really demonstrated some great aspects of the different forms of poetry, and the teacher was great with suggestions and feedback on the things we wrote. It has been really cold and overcast here in Louisiana for the last week or so. Alot of folks in this part have been getting sick as well, so I think it is a bug and not my poetry.......lol
. I do hope that you get to feeling better soon and shake that parasite. Dont really know if that is a word or not but it sounded suave and fit so I am going to give you a 9 for creativity 
. Nah I am a jack of all trades and master of none in disguise, only veiling the truth and partially revealing bits and pieces so that one might think I was other that what I truly am.......now I am totally confussed on whom I am supposed to be.....lol. I appreciate your great comment and thank you for reading through this. Take care.
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I really like this! The rhyme is good, the repetition gives it continuity, the picture fits perfectly. We have had quite windy conditions in So Cal this week, and my throat and lungs feel parched from the dry air and the cold virus that is currently parasitizing me (is that a word???
). Reading this definitely made me more uncomfortable!!! LOL! Great write! You are a 'real' poet in disguise, aren't you?
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Why thank you for stopping in and having a read through this write. I do appreciate your comments on it. I really enjoyed taking the class and learning from the basis that you established in the layout. I am glad that I signed up for it. Thank you for the appluase and the kind comment. Take care.
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Thought I'd stop by here as well so that I might offer applause - again, rhyme, alliteration and repetition are all very well demonstrated. I particularly like the rhyme in the first and third stanzas...
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So you like tongue twisting, errr I meant tongue twisters.....lol. I was trying to highlight the sounds in this write but I think that some of the others in our class did a better job, there are some really talented writers here at AP. Thanx for stopping in and rolling your tongue around on this write....lol. Take care.
Can you roll you tongue? Not everyone can do that, just a snippet for you. -
Now this twisted my tongue~~as I read it out loud which is a good thing
Great piece my friend and look forward to more~
Love that rhyme
and much love~Desire
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I do appreciate the grand comment macandrew and am glad that this write propelled you towards nature. It always brightens my spirits to be among the gentle breezes, I really like laying in the field on a summer day with the sun beaming down and a gentle breeze to cool me. Thanx John for having a read and take care.
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most enjoyable
Very well done. You have brought this reader back to the power and beauty of nature with your words. I sure love a windy day with all it's invisible force.
This was a real pleasure to read.
thanks,
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Why thank you polgara, I tried to blow the rhyme right outta this write, sorta like I'm gonna wash that grey right outta my hair, im gonna wash that grey.......crazy commercials...lol. I am really enjoying the class and actually learning a few things. Imagine that, me learning, forgive me a cruel chuckle....lol. I actually know what some of the people are talking about when they use poetic terms now days, and sorta how they apply....lol. Thanx for reading through this write, I appreciate it. Take care.
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Fantastic piece! Lots of energy to it -- great flow and rhyme patterns.
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I appreciate you stopping in and having a read through this write Nicolette and leaving such a beautiful comment. I love to leave imagery everywhere in a write and try to find new things or new ways to write. LOL yes careful, dont linger too long or your skirt too will be blown up....lol. Thank you, I hope in life that the wind fills your sails and pushes you to wherever you want to go. Take care.
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On the wings of the wind you took me to the four corners of the world! Great work, my friend - powerful and fragrant in imagery - just like the wind. It is always a challenge to write something fresh and original - and you did just that. Thanks for sharing nature's wild beauty with us! And I smiled at that comment about the skirts....lol!! May the wind always be at your back.
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Thank you Jillosophy for the grand comment. I tell you I guess I am going to have to get my camera ready for all these skirts going up with the drafty confines of this write....lol. Can anyone truly catch the wind? I have only harnessed its powers for a short whirling ride....lol. I know what you meant and I do appreciate you expressing your thoughts. Thank you and take care.
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Well now, if this doesn't blow your skirt up I don't know what will. wonderful write about wind. Your choice of words and imagery were outstanding. I think you "caught" it's every mood.
Great write!
jill
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I appreciate your great comment on this write chasingtheday. I hope the class likes it as much as you. I shall have to get over to your page and check out some of those writes you are talking about. Did you mean beautifully cold writing, or good groovy writing?....lol. Thank you for reading and commenting on this write. I got a chin strap for my hat....lol.
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Thank you galfalfa, I dont think I found it within any books but rather upon the dusty shelves of my over-indulged mind. There are so many different aspects of the wind that one could capture in lines describing its good and bad traits. The hair thing usually doesnt bother me too much but I hate it when it blows my skirt up and reveals my thong.......lol. Just make sure that the lightning is at full strike before you tell me so I can follow Ben Franklins research up. Thank you for reading through this and the lovely comment. Take care.
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i love it! have been messing with alliteration in some poems - this is pretty cool poetry holds onto hat - geroff lol
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a brilliant piece
I really liked this one Hammer, one would think it was a page torn from a great poetry book, worded to perfection - you did forget to mention how the wind can wreck havoc with one's hair...cause a runny nose if it's cold and blow sundresses up. I can't wait 'til the next windy day - just so i can tell you to go fly a kite
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Thank you kindly Queen, I really dont think we get graded on the assignments we just do them and it is counted as the assignment completed. I thought the picture went well with the write also, it took me a lifetime to find it.....lol, well it seemed like it anyways. I appreciate your wonderful comment bunches, take care.
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What a great poem. You must have gotten an A+ on this. This picture goes so well with it. Very cool. Queen
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