take the pills
take them all
kill yourself
make the fall
jump the edge
drown yourself
you can do it
i wont tell
im the voice within
helping you thru
end it now
i would if i were you
who needs life when u can die?
you can go to a better place
i promise it wont end at your grave
ive been thru this before
be strong be brave
it wont hurt long
maybe a little sting
then it will be gone
and so will we
im not bad
im good i swear
im here to help
how much more can u bear?
this is the voice i heard that night
the night i tryed to take my life
i didnt work
and im still here
in a hospital
not dead
but near
Author notes
Written July 23rd, 2004
What did you think
Comments
-
awww this poem is deadly i have a friend who was been in ur shoes b4 and this one realy remind me of her well keep up da good work
-
awsome!
oh wow! that was amazing! i have been in your shoes there! i thought that was just so great and so well written1 i loved the ryming added in there! it was so emotional and real! the reality of it was great cause there almoste is a lil vocie like that inside everyones head! some of them say kill ur self and some say live. i personally have the one that says kill yourself bu to well i tried and it didnt work! but thanks a bunch for you comments and aplause on my poetry! i think you a verry tallented poet too! take care! ~kiersten~ -
*shivers* Although I've never been through this exactly, I realize that alot of people do have to go through this. You did a very good job with expressing emotion here. Keep up the good work.
-
nice write
wow thats awesome, ive been in a situation like that before, awesome way you put it, great write
Adding your comment:
3 old applause
