going crazy
these thoughts in my head
no simple healing
wishing i was dead
death filled thoughts
twisted but lucky
life itself
its sucky
knives aren't sharp enough
and the guns not loaded
the musics not loud enough
and to move i would be scolded
so i just let their blades
slip any place
blood soaking my breast
and streaming down my face
my screams
fill the air
pleasure with pain
and not a care
piercing
is what is a blade
my eyes get dark
as my vision will fade
dying now
its not so bad
like the best thing
i have ever had
Author notes
Written July 23rd, 2004
A contest entry
- Show Me What You've Got by LostParamour.
500 points, ended September 16, 2004, 61 entries
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wow..this is really good. i liked reading it. the flow was great and what not. well, good luck ion the contest. =) peace
~jenn -
Thanks for entering my contest... Good luck!!! I'll make meaningful comments when I judge the poems... I'm just thanking everybody for entering right now...
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hey lil'sis this was a scary one!!! i hope its just your writting. well its a great write. keep going strong. love ya much.
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AWESOME!!
this has excellent flow! this is really cool i can so relate! and you described it so very well!!
you are an excellent poet!
keep up the good luck
much love and luck to ya!
KATIE!! -
wow...i liked it...the flow was great...i could totally relate...congrats on a good write
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WOWNESS ...jeezzzz little sis..what came over you here...SHIT LORD...lol This is great but then not so great...hmmm...I don't know...The flow is awesome..I guess you gots your words back now..SO type type type..I know that when I lose my words it sucks BAD...so when I get them....I use them all in one day...Maybe that's WHY they leave..Hmmmm...not sure..so whatever...Great Job...I think its a winner...
Much love
THE BIGGER ONE -
How do you come up with stuff like this?
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