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Roots

Roots
She gazes into the mirror with despondency
There they are again
Roots
Dull drab ends to henna strands
Her only ounce of fairness fading
As what she truly is breaks through
What she has strived so hard to be
Despite her efforts to change, become beautiful
Her body seems to fight her heart
Her outward plainness leaves many unable
To see her inner elegance
Eyes and hair the shade of dirt
Complexion colorless
Legs scarred
Movements awkward
Eyes empty
Screams silent
Every day she sees many who turn away at the sight of her
Until the day she changes her mind
Dyes her tawny mane oxblood red
Now each time she turns around the sun sets fire to her hair and her heart
She welcomes stares and laughs at jeers and
Struts about in control
No roots
Only wings

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Written July 23rd, 2004

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  • theuseofpronouns
    August 5, 2004
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    excellent

    I can really relate with this poem.
    What she has strived so hard to be
    Despite her efforts to change, become beautiful
    Her body seems to fight her heart
    Her outward plainness leaves many unable
    To see her inner elegance.
    Beauty is a pain in the butt. *sniff* lol! Excellent poem, You did an extremely nice job putting this together.


  • moonwick
    August 2, 2004
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    WOW!!! this is perfectly remarkable! I'll never quite look at hair dye the same again! I guess your words apply not only to hair dye, but to many things in life. We try to cover up our plainness, just wanting to fit in and turn someone's head. Then, yes then we can get them to know who we really are inside. Excellent write, and thanx for the comment! Keep up the good work, and good luck in all you do!


  • Jetsabel
    July 27, 2004
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    this was a really great poem, very honest kinda how i feel only backwards, if that makes any sense, i really like it though, its a great poem that shows lots of emotions, keep it up! Oh, i like how you described the color of her eyes and hair the color of dirt great job!!


  • Huntress silver member
    July 26, 2004
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    This is a poem that really makes the reader think. I enjoyed it very much. Excellent. Huntress

  • --Blue--
    July 23, 2004
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    very good

    Wow. I really liked this piece a lot. You took something very simple and turned it into so much more. Your message was incredibly strong. This poem made me think and that always gives extra points. Awesome work.

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