breathe soft
you whisper
i love you...
in my heart, a flutter
red ears are my tell
warm smile
a faint scent
lilacs...
in my eyes
your beauty burns
enchanting...
you warm my
flesh and spirit
in your embrace
i know comfort
in your kiss
i know passion
in your love
i know heaven...
my angel, however do you hide your wings?
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yeppers...,
Written June 2nd, 2002
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this is sooo sweet *weaping* I am so glad that you found that special person in your life, we all deserve that attention...love it ~~Jenn -
don't touch it!
yeppers is my word! but anyway awesome work -
I'll settle for anything, it's an open forum. I've already stated once, however, that my titles rarely have any connection to anything other than being titles. Half the fun of writing, for me, is coming up with great 'sounding' titles. Fun titles. Sorry you weren't pleased with the body of the work. I know love poems are hard to pull off without becoming a total sap, but...
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needs rework
It's nice... but I think it's been done a bit. The title is the best part, I was intrigued by it and it made me want to read the poem. Don't really see the connection to the poem, however, I don't care, it's cool. The poem is nice... but do you want to settle for just nice...? -
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goz... you ARE an angel.
an off-kilter angel, maybe...
right on with the tenderness factor. -
don't touch it!
*sigh*
gosh this was so tender, loving
loved the last line soooo much!!
well honestly??? they are a real bitch with strapless gowns.. but thats just me
LOL :)
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