As we join in passion
under starlight sky
daydreams imagined
no thoughts of goodbye.
Under starlight sky
lingering sweet wantoness
no thoughts of goodbye
while stealing first kiss.
Lingering sweet wantoness
between us explored
while stealing first kiss
inhibitions ignored.
Between us explored
no feelings of shame
inhibitions ignored
we are two the same.
No feelings of shame
daydreams imagined
we are two the same
as we join in passion....
Author notes
http://allpoetry.com/poem/104624
introubleintx
A contest entry
- The Pantoum Challenge by Denierim.
2000 points, ended September 30, 2007, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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So much passion in one poem... You did well with this form, bringing out the love and the passion that could almost be touched. The Pantoum form really worked well in this piece, bringing a very soft and calming feel to it, strengthening the feeling of love through it all. I love the background also; so so beautiful.
Wonderful work with this piece!
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Thanks Moonfruit! :)
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don't touch it!
The background gives real depth to
the eloquence of your poem.
Well crafted. -
Thanks Son...These are almost as hard to write as sonnets! :)
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don't touch it!
That was amazing, good job. -
Thank you Tracie... :)
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excellent
Hi Trouble
I loved this poem by you, very heartfelt and passionate. Felt the longing and the need, well penned my friend
~HUGS~
T -
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This was very beautiful and very passionate. -
don't touch it!
Beautiful write, a real love poem. -
don't touch it!
I think this is very beautiful.....
~~ Connie ~~
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