In my final hour,
I'll gaze unto the sky,
I'll search upon
The naked night,
For my life to shine,
To twinkle right above thier heads,
For never will I leave,
I'll shine forever
In the night,
You'll feel me in the breeze.
I'll sing within the rainbow skies,
And dance within the snow,
I'll be the guiding light you see,
You'll never be alone.
Author notes
I would LOVE to kow what people thought of this piece?? 
Written July 20th, 2004
A contest entry
- Dead things breed tears by echo-ink.
1700 points, ended August 21, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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I really liked this, simple, and from the heart.
I spelling error THIER...should be their
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truly a great poem. sadly beautiful in a way.. the imagery was outstanding. great write!
xxSExx -
a great piece, filled with wonderful imagery...line 6, thier s/b their. Great job.
Rory -
Great
I miss you Leah
Wonderful poem - you are still one of my all-time favorites. Please keep writing.
Sag -
Amazing
this was awesome this is seriously my new favorite write, i love it!! the begining had a great lead into it and made me want to keep reading and the end tied it up perfectly (i can never end my poems write usually i just repeat a line or something lol) i really liked this part:
I'll search upon
The naked night,
For my life to shine,
To twinkle right above thier heads,
For never will I leave,
for some reason i really did like it, i liked the way you strung the words together. I loved it!! Keep up the great work! -Pammie-
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Well done.
I didn't love it, since it wasn't as dark as I wanted it to be...but I did enjoy it. A lovely piece, and I have to say it made me a bit happier. Good job.
I liked these lines:
"I'll sing within the rainbow skies,
And dance within the snow"
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AWESOME!!!
I really like this alot. It tells me how your soul will shine on even in death. And the words are beautiful. This poem really made my night. Its thoughtful and the descriptive words catch me. I'm almost speechless. It has so much character and influence. You wanted to know what I thought but I really can't begin to tell you how I feel. Your awesome.
Peace and love,
mj -
beautiful
spiritual and hopeful
forever part of this world and perhaps somehow more free in death? i realy like this, you made me thoughtful, in the best possible way
thank you
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This is beautiful Leah, it's been a while since I was here and had the pleasure of your words, I love this piece, it creates beauty inside my mind and I'd like to think that this is similar to what I would do in my final hours also. The imagery is divine. Well done
Karen -
IN LAST ONE IT IS THE FIRST WHICH IMPRESSED ME ALOT ITS REALLY WELL IMAGINED AND BEAUTIFUL
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This piece was sweet, beautiful, and worth a thousand words with the picture that you painted in my mind. I would never wish for you to leave us, for your writing is so fantastic! The flow kept on throughout the piece and every word was necessary, so you didn't use the horrid verbage!
I love that word, "verbage". 
So yeah, thanks for commenting on ".Apocalypse-Six-Six." and keep up the great writing! You have talent!
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very very very good
Amazing, awesome, delightful are the words for this poem. The flow is so very good. I truly love the simple poems it touches us on all levels. Refreshing view of the poem. So very creative and very well put.
Have a great and joyful day ahead.
Take care -
Very sweet!
Faith, love and hope. Let yourself be guided and protected by them, and you will have joy and security all your life...just be happy! Lily -
Amazing, simply amazing. I thank you for commenting on one of my poems, and I do hope to be able to continue commenting on yours, for they are truly lovely and inspiring.
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Now that's a kick arse piece! Truly awesome stuff. Keep it up
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darkness comes and darkness goes,
even as the stars do glow,
what is it that is so black,
when deep blue stralight takes us back,
back to daydreams and twinkle lights,
and ponder darkness night to night,
but what is darkness but deep dark blue,
sprinkled starlights to know its hue,
but dark is not the evil of dying light,
its just the perfect backdrop to show us light,
send you all my warmth and fondest wishes,
your in my prayers and in the stars as well
pretty poem Leah, but a bit of sadness in it, stars and forever do have a sad ring to them you know? anywhos lovely as always,
now I can see why it twas I have missed you so,
Most sincerelillies,
joe
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i can agree with everyone above. this is like pure poetry. dude you are freaking great. seriously. keep it up. literally you are the shiZZneTT
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Yes I agree you paint quite an amazing picture for readers to imagine. And you can feel its meaning deep within. Well Done.
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This is beautiful. Truly a piece of art. It makes you feel all tingly. Truly a soft sexy piece.
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aww its just So fucking amazing!I like rainbows!I LIKE IT!keep it up!
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