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A car driving pig

There once was a pig named Gar
He lived in the back of a bar
he ate food all day,
his birthday's in may
and he drives a shiny sports car.

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Written July 19th, 2004

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  • ecrivain01
    December 27, 2004
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    not bad

    This is cute, but I didn't like the fourth line since it was obviously there just for the rhyme scheme. I think you could easily find a different line like:

    now he's running away
    in his shiney, new sports car.

    Or

    And he drives every day
    in his shiney, new sports car

    and so on.

    It was a fun read anyway.


  • IrisUnseen
    July 21, 2004
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    lol this is awesome. rock on!
    Edited on Jul 21, 11:15 p.m. because 'no reason '.


  • Aevil-Faerie
    July 19, 2004
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    Lmao! This was great, made me laugh, I love it so much!
    Hee hee hee!

    Great write.

    Georgia