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Feeling and friendship

Feeling and friendship

Hurt, pain
Trying to keep sane
Smiling, laughing
Screaming, kicking
Wanting help
But not knowing how
Needing someone now
Silent tears
Screaming fears
Streams of hurt
Pain being the main
Needing a hug
Shoulder shrugs
Putting on an act
Making a pact
Lets play pretend
And see that things won’t mend
That way
We won’t have to play
We will have to talk and say

Author notes

Thankyou for reading my poem!
Written July 18th, 2004

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  • angelic misha
    July 23, 2004
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    That poem sounds just like how I feel sometimes! Keep on written hun, you're great at this!

  • Desperado
    July 18, 2004
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    I know it needs punctuation but when i wrote it that was the last thing on my mind and to me part of the impact is the lack of punctuation if that makes sense!

  • Jaffa
    July 18, 2004
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    I love this peom you have to read it more than once for it to fully register and to understand it! i'm liking the lets pretend! but I have a small suggestion! you haven't actually used any commas or full stops! fab writing hun keep it up!