chocolate candy
ate one, ate one, ate one
etcetera.
chocolate candy
just ate one
just ate all
chocolate candy
what box
haven't seen it.
chocolate candy
yes I ate them all
watching your diet.
chocolate candy
ate them all still want more
back to store
Author notes
Written July 18th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Candy-Licious!! by Phoenix-Flame.
320 points, ended March 30, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - candy by honey bear.
600 points, ended April 23, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Classic Candies by Tears In Rain.
700 points, ended November 15, 2008, 5 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Very yummy bits. Like a five piece box of chocolates, each with a different flavor. Make more! (There's usually at least 10 in a box). Mighty funny. Not in the top 3 only for lack of explicit brand reference, and having been a previous write.
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sounds like a box of Whitman Samplers, you lucky dog. They're my favorite!
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lol, this was so clevr and funny and just a delight to read. couldn't help yourself I guess and love the ending, hahah! watching someone else's diet after 'ate one/ate all'...Just a delight, good luck in the contest!
Thanks for the all gone chocolate treat!
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thank yo ufor entering and good luck in the contest with this very funny (and cleverly done)write
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(LOL)
thank you for the laugh
yes you are guilty...
A very naughty you
Good Luck in the contest
blessings
~Cheryl~
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Good!
So you like chocolate ay?very god poem and i will judge it well -
Exactly how chocolate ends up at my house, great poem!
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haha, this was great!!!!! Especially since I'll think I only ate one piece, and then when i go back for a second I realize I ate the whole box. lol, funny!
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Lol this was hilarious, but I'm not sure about defining it as a haiku. As far as I know haikus must have a syllable count of 5,7,5. Aside from that, incredibly funny write!
-morgana
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cool poem! Yes, lol, I LOVE choclate and sometimes I say I will only eat a few but I end up eating most of the packet, lol, Thanks for sharing this, I enjoyed reading it
NatureGirl ~ -
This is really funny! Especially to someone who relates so well (Believe me, I do). I love how you've taken the haiku form to this humourous level. It seems to be broken up, but thats how my thoughts are sometimes (just ate one...) and to try not to feel so guilty (just ate all...). Awesome job!!! Have a beautiful day!
*spiritree*
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