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Montgomery Old Growth Redwoods at Full Moon
Mendocino County, CA
Winter, Spring and Summer of 2003
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Gently gleaming from shadowed depths, a single pillar shines,
Held in place by the full moon’s gaze, suspended on the night;
Bold within the enshrouded gloom, the silent moonbeam climbs.
Vaulted high into moonstone heights, both bark and bough alike
Etch mosaics of subtle hue in countless shapes and shades,
Held in place by the full moon’s gaze, suspended on the night.
Shifting softly with light subdued, the moon with traces vague
Brushes ever so faint the forms where rays, diffuse and dim,
Etch mosaics of subtle hue in countless shapes and shades.
Slowly walking, devoid of thought, low glimmers skim the skin,
Moonlight faint as a whisper’s breath, with tingle and tickle touch,
Brushes ever so faint the forms where rays diffuse and dim.
Sitting down where the wood is deep amid the moonshade hush,
Downy zephyrous breezes join the opal-toned caress,
Moonlight faint as a whisper’s breath with tingle and tickle touch.
Sudden, deep in the patterned depths one massive tree is blessed,
Caught entranced by the moon’s embrace, and all my heart is thrilled;
Downy zephyrous breezes join the opal-toned caress.
Here my spirit escapes the mind and laves in peace until
Gently gleaming from shadowed depths, a single pillar shines,
Caught entranced by the moon’s embrace, and all my heart is thrilled;
Bold within the enshrouded gloom, the silent moonbeam climbs.
Author notes
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blackmail press: www.homestead.com/NZPoetsOnline/index.html (Issue 15)
to learn more about the terzanelle: allpoetry.com/Column/784852/all=1
Written July 14th, 2003
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Beautiful imagery and captiving wording. Well done. A delight to read.
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Now I see you getting braver with the form. Testing new poetic devices and carrying it beyond its basic structure. The imagery is absolutely beautiful. You definately have a way with words.
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Okay. I've printed it out and am going to study this terzanelle of yours as well as those from the Lotus Tree. This was incredibly moving for me. My father has always been a tree hugger (literally) and I think that gene's been passed down to me. I'm no hippy by any means; but nature in her grandeur is incredible to behold. (gosh I need to get out more.)
Absinthe
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Hi there! I don't think you need me to tell you how good this is. In my eyes you are right up there with Rutlandxyz. I can react on a personal level, but can't be a helpful critique as you know since I am just learning, and will learn lots from reading yours.
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It's almost like I can see hear and feel all of the instaces this poem describes! I love your creative word choices and your use of imagery. This poem is a wonderful piece of art. Keep writing, you have a wonderful talent!
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I stand in awe as the picture of this magnificent pine came to life with your penned words. Truely a wonderous sight. I have the Sequoia NP just a few miles from me. I haven't been there in 6 months. I might just have to take a drive today
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what a beautiful picture you've painted! a lovely choice of words and the form puts me in a trance. this must of taken you a while to write but it's worth every minute.
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Your poem has enough imagery to bring the place straight to us!
I can't comment on the form, but the poetic sense in it is just wonderful! Pleasant and soothing, more a reader doesn't need to ask
Mari
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Again...WOW. It's almost like I'm right there! I love the clear images your poetry creates. Amazing
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thanks for the link, but actually no picture is really required one just has to read your poem and can see the place through it, the descriptions are really excellent.
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OMG, I was there, I could see it, feel it, even smell it. Wow that was great. I love the line
"Vaulted high into moonstone heights, both bark and bough alike"
for some reason that line grabbed me. the poem is fabulous, so very well written. ty oh so much for sharing it with us. great write. -
That reminds me! I should post a link to an image of this wood. There's no way I could offer an image from the wood in the full moon. Even if I took a picture, I don't have a camera that could do the wood justice at night. This poem was written after spending the full moon in the wood over 6 months worth of full moons. This activity was in active pursuit of a poem, apparently this one, though "Path by Moon" and "Nightwalk" also seem to have come out of these six months.
Anyway, to get an idea what the wood looks like in the daylight, visit this location: virtualguidebooks.com/NorthCalif/KlamathTrinity/Ukiah/MontgomeryWoodsFallen.html -- someone was kind enough to take a panoramic of this location. The panoramic shown (you'll need quicktime installed) is of a place right near the beginning of the wood, a place I refer within myself as The Cathedral. -
amazingly beautiful imagery. I applaud your talent. Your poem took me on a picture perfect journey.
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This is going to take a few more passes to fully appreciate the creativity of your write. Thought provoking, extremely well thought out..
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