My heart is moved by that which wastes away;
My soul is rendered incomplete by beauty
And yearns in vain for that which cannot stay.
An urgency eclipses simple joy,
And caught within its raging rush unruly,
My heart is moved by that which wastes away.
How often I have heaved the heavy sigh,
A heedless hope that heats within profusely
And yearns in vain for that which cannot stay.
Today, as when a half unconscious boy,
Enslaved by aches that govern absolutely,
My heart is moved by that which wastes away.
My sense is charmed by figures slight and spry,
The fairest features doomed to rot unduly,
And yearns in vain for that which cannot stay.
I’m plagued by wonton wants that just destroy,
That urge with fiendish force until, all gloomy,
My heart is moved by that which wastes away
And yearns in vain for that which cannot stay.
Author notes
to learn more about the villanelle: allpoetry.com/Column/784856/all=1
Written April 26th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- 3 choices, mainly dark. by heartatselfdestruct.
300 points, ended September 25, 2004, 15 entries
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I know this site offers some features that you seem to enjoy, but it is your "voice" that is far more important than any embellishments such as background, images and fonts.
Think about that if you will.
I hope that you will reconsider offering your poetic voice as well as your literary talent with language aspects to our slowly growing group. This villanelle is an example of what I mean by "voice" and it ought to be heard by a larger and more appreciative crowd.
Kind regards,
Del
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Great!
Wow...That's really beautiful! But just one query. Words like 'spry' and 'stay' do not exactly rhyme. Are slant rhymes allowed in villanelles afterall??
Still, it's superb... ofcourse, not something new for you! -
I really liked this. I have written one villanelle, it was super hard because I can't rhyme very well, so I don't think it flows so great. But this was awesome. Truely great.
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wonderful
I love villanelles, but have never really been successful at writing them...definitely good job on writing that form. Beyond that, it's a wonderfully composed and beautifully honest work. -
Awesome
Wow. This speaks to me a lot. What a perfect topic for a villanelle, 'that which wastes away' I find nothing whatever out of place in this poem. It is wonderfully crafted and carefully thought out. Write on.
~Bezoar -
the content in this piece is astounding. i am in awe of your ability for beautiful phrase. the structure both confused and intrigued me as the rhyme pattern varied from what i had learned for the villanelle. is this a variation of the form? if so i would love to know more about the pattern or any variations of patterns with this form.
a wonderful write. -
When I first heard this form years ago, i didn't care for it at all... in fact, i swore i'd never write one. However, i did end up writing one sorta by accident once (i'll send you the link). And, I have grown to appreciate and respect poets who write these well. You do.
I think these lines sum this up for me;
"A heedless hope that heats within profusely
And yearns in vain for that which cannot stay."
Wonderful piece of writing !
~ Wendy
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This is really nice. I love the way you wrote this, it really speaks out to the reader. Nice job
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excellent
frail things are full of fragile beauty...I love th imagery and the expression of this poem...even though I am not familiar with vilannelle structure, the poem seems to follow a regular structure.
I really enjoyed reading this poem.
Thanx for sharing.
Thanx for your comment on my poem.
Best Wishes
Di -
truly great
ohhhhhh i LOVE this. this is exactly how i feel, it is the frail, almost broken things that i love. bruised battered delicate sharp edges ephemeral. this could be my motto:
"My heart is moved by that which wastes away
And yearns in vain for that which cannot stay."
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