A gentle guiding whisper touched my mind,
Behind the din and chaos, where subtle voices speak,
And counseled with a wisdom firm and kind.
Although I faced the world without a friend,
Among the thronging masses, alone within my grief,
A gentle guiding whisper touched my mind.
A being came from somewhere far beyond,
Beyond this realm of vision, a place we cannot see,
And counseled with a wisdom firm and kind.
My heart was pulled to view the spaces grand,
Where filled with awe I trembled, while always there unseen,
A gentle guiding whisper touched my mind.
Where dreams and waking vision merge and blend
A shade has often offered encouragement discreet
And counseled with a wisdom firm and kind.
I ventured far and wide a vagabond,
And when I ached with hunger or shivered in the breeze,
A gentle guiding whisper touched my mind
And counseled with a wisdom firm and kind.
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featured in:
One-In-Four (May 2004 edition)
to learn more about the villanelle: allpoetry.com/Column/784856/all=1
Written March 5th, 2004
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I bet you...
This seems to be personal...from when you were traveling across the country...and the gentle whisper touching the mind is either God or poetry..because from what I know about you I think you were a christian at this time...what seems to confirm my hypothesis is the phrase "I ventured far and wide a vagabond" and even more so "And when I ached with hunger or shivered in the breeze"...another hint is the contest above titled "Angels" as far as the God part goes...great great write
KAY
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its SO good
Its so simple and elegant yet somehow so... complex.. I don't know.. but I think I finally learnt about the villanelle... *off to write one*... thanks for sharing this with us -
Ah, this is a simply beautiful piece. I too loved the line, "Where dreams and waking vision merge and blend" That rings well for me. A lovely villanelle, that's my verdict.
~Bezoar
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This reminds me of when I hear my father call my name. He left us in '78. So this also brings to mind a whispering of angels. Quite lovely this villenelle is. Touches me very much.
~Willow~ -
This was a really great poem, i'm not sure what your interpretation of the last lines are:
"A gentle guiding whisper touched my mind."
Perhaps it could be hope, or even to the extent of God. Anyway, great write, thanks for the share, Kate
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Happy to explicate -- what lost you?
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great
huh...It's very good, I realy enjoyed reading it.
Where dreams and waking vision merge and blend... Great stanza
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catch yall laterz
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i loved the gentle touch of this line
A gentle guiding whisper touched my mind.
It gave the whole poem a tender soothing flow. -
I am so lost, but it sounded awesome.
-Jake
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