Softly flutters down a chilly breeze
Whirling freely through emerald blades
Gently swaying the blossoming seas
Standing gracefully with many shades
Whirling freely through emerald blades
The celestial roaring takes control
Standing gracefully with many shades
Weave together the delicate souls
The celestial roaring takes control
Sweeping underneath the sweet petals
Weave together the delicate souls
‘til the romance in the air settles
Sweeping underneath the sweet petals
Gently swaying the blossoming seas
‘til the romance in the air settles
Softly flutters down a chilly breeze
Author notes
A Pantoum is a verse form composed by the second and fourth lines of a stanza repeated as the first and third lines of the following stanza. E.g. abab, bcbc, cdcd, dada.
Written July 17th, 2004
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Nice flow and very flowing, evocative language. I like it!
Yours is a great example of this form, as well as being a lovely poem. Good job! -
fluttering off the tongue
I love this form! Its one of my favorites to write in (so much I have the form memorized lol) and you utilized it wonderfully! Pantoums are wonderful to describe a moment in time and you did so just so beautifully. Good luck in the contest ^_^
~Chantel
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Wow, that was a really interesting form of poetry.. I've never seen it before. The name pantoum sounded farmilliar, but I couldn't remember what it was or anything. How incredibly intricate... very cool. I wish I could write like that.. The best I can do is a Sonnet or Acrostic. But anyway, really wonderful job. Good luck in the contest!
~Rose~
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I would have to say this is quite an interesting form of poetry, I am unsure if I have ever seem it done before, Well if I have I must not have not remembered it, but I think that I will now because this poem is just fantastic, I was able to read through it once and didn’t seem to stumble on the words at all, which I usually always do, mental blocks or something, anyway I love this piece, like the style, great job plain and simple.....KraM.... here is your clapping hands.;-]
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I've looked at pantoums before and know that certain lines are repeated, but have never written a pantoum myself. I think you've done an excellent job for a first attempt! The fluttering petals create a gentle, delicate and graceful picture and feeling. Lovely imagery of nature and romance you've painted in words. I enjoyed this very much!
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Wow, good write and it flowed well also.
I really liked it, keep up the good work.
See ya later,
P.S. Do u like Nikes? LOL
~theshadowpoet~
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