Thinking about the future
And what it has in store
It only makes me realise
How much I love you more
When I close my eyes
I see your heart, your soul
They keep me surviving
As our lives unfold
This bond has been made
Between your heart and mine
I anticipate the day
Our physical emotions entwine
Composing these feelings
On an open canvas
I try my best to colour the words
The intensity, I did not plan this
I look up from the script
The pain in my eyes
The crimson tide of loneliness
The writer's pen denies
I can't think about you
I can't breathe anymore
I can't walk by myself
Until you walk through my door
Author notes
For Nathan
In a list
A contest entry
- ravens contest by ravenofdarkness.
300 points, ended December 3, 2004, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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The way you manage to fall so in love with someone that you can't truly function without them, is a beautiful feeling. I'm happy that you feel that way, as so many people never feel it.. this is a beautiful poem and you've truly shown your feelings for him. well done
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lovely *rav*
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beautiful!!!! and the perfect backgroudn chosen!
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great
dats so beautiful great job -
I loved how well you expressed your feelings. This is so sweet. You did a great job with the wording and rhyming too. Thanks for entering and always keep writing. ~Karli~
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This is an awesome write
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this is amazing. i feel the same way sometimes. you captured the feeling so well. great job!
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Beautifully written. He is a lucky guy. Such raw emotion.
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very nice way of expressing emotions, good job! -
don't touch it!
such emotion and feeling to this...
very much so enjoyed :)
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