As I taste her neck's flavor,
A hint of pine in her dark curls
skin soft, glowing in the moonlight
hoping for dawn to never come
mine to ecstacy, to surrender, to inhale and delight,
Just you and me,
Do you want to be a vampire?
I ask her,She smiles at me
A beacon of hope
A meal to engage in the most senses,
Unaware, unthinking, simply being
I make them cry;My thoughts never again to see the light of day
Your eyes captured me
Or do I capture them?
In the face of death
Darkness comes quickly
We can now be together forever, ageless
A time,
That only vampires know
Succumbed to the pain
Daylight is almost here
Soon etched into the crimnson sky
Hurry say goodbye to life
As my fangs sink deeper into your flesh
And walk with me in the darkness forever
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Written May 30th, 2002
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Wow
You are good at these.... Almost too good. I will keep reading because I am now emerced in your darkened tales.
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excellent presentation
I enjoyed this one Susan. This vampire is so good at seducing his victim, she becomes hypnotized to his charms. Who could resist?
Maybe I need to hang out in the darkness. LOL You never know, I do find Vampires sexy.
Hope you are feeling well Sis. Take care, and I will talk to you later.
Ethereal Melody
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Great Work.
This was a great read. You have a talent with words. The words in this poem aroused my senses and made me aware of so much about the poem. It read really nicely. Keep up the amazing work. Very nice job! -
Truly amazing
Never thought of vampire poems this is really great and timeless. Very erotic so very beautiful. The ending is breath taking like you are apart of it. It draws the reader in consumes them at the end. Wow this is a poem.
love it and very well done
love Brenda -
Vampires eh?.....Reminds me of someone I know...Now who could that be? I love the desperation near the end of this piece, the sun will rise soon so we must finish quickly. Being completely lost in another soul. This was beautiful.
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My, this poem was erotic and very very beautiful. Such a delightful way you seem to put this morbid topic, and turn it into something lovely. Amazing as usual.
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I just want to quote your lines! Alas, I am not in the mood to plagurize, or spell properly, unless that WAS spelt properly, and in that case, ignore me
As before, this poem was wonderfully visual. I love the pine line, and there I go again, rhyming.
You make me want to become a vampire...and I love the sun, so your power is great
Your flow is so easy to read, and I am glad I stumbled across you, else I would be missing out on a wonderful writer. -
The flow of this piece of work is like a river, constant. It is great the way it is but i wish i could just read on. I really enjoy it.
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I really like this write as well. I love vampires I once again love the words chosen and your flow.Great work!
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Very well done i liek this peom is awsome job well done
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WEll done this is a very well written poem.
DimishedFaith -
ooooo i love it! very good write
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i like this. i don't know...i think vampires are really sexy. i like how kind of romantic this was, about a time only vampires know. being together eternally and staying young physically. i don't know about that though, i'd be so jaded in a thousand years i'd shove a stake into my own heart. but anyway...very neat. sexy, even. i've had really naughty dreams a few times involving vampires and...stuff...bu
t that's okay...nevermind .
it would be nice to just succumb. fuck now, suffer later.
good piece,
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i love vampiric tales... poems...
i find this sort of poem to be arousing. its subtly erotic... in my mind anyway. -
Great write
Loved this write my dear and enjoyed the imagery~ Great job and I will be reading more~ Keep them coming~ Great storyline also~ Look forward to more~ Big hugs and much love~ Desire
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excellent
cryptic love story... i love it! tell me, was her blood sweet? haha. great job on this, i like it a lot. thanks for the comment, and from your talent on this work.. i'm definitely gonna check more out. -
don't touch it!
Very well done, sensual, inviting, and spine tingling. -
excellent
Purrr... Definatly inviting. Very nice, sounds like Annie. I love her words, they are so poetic. Your's seem so inviting. UMmmmm, my mind is wondering now, I'm picturing me as one of these characters. I'm putting my self in each one's shoes. What would I say? What would I do? It's so inviting.
Roury -
don't touch it!
I think its time we realise,
That vampires are ordinary guys.
Who happen to like a redder wine,
Why not? as long as its not mine. LOL -
Thanks u all this is the 2nd vampire poem i wrotei did a earlier one also check it out!
Blseesings Susan -
don't touch it!
oooooh! I like it a lot! hehe. I am a rather picky Vampire fan... but this was beautiful! ^_____^ Keep up the good work! Great write!!!! -
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definately caught me !
come check out a challenge that I have out.
I think you'll like it !
Bill -
don't touch it!
Wow! Fantastic! Great imagery, story, and an excellent conveyance of emotion.
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