Shadows yield the slightest of sound, concealed by the foliage dense;
Sudden streaks of webbed silhouettes wing their erratic ways,
Granting but the hint of a glimpse, just flickers against the depths.
Breezes tease the murmuring leaves with nearly quiescent breath;
Something circles within the dark, voicing a mouse-like noise—-
Shadows yield the slightest of sound, concealed by the foliage dense.
Hidden motions mix in the trees, beyond their perceived intent;
Random figures startle the sight, shapes that evade the eyes,
Granting but the hint of a glimpse, just flickers against the depths.
Careful steps, disturbing the ground, reveal an abstracted quest;
Footfall echoes fade in the gloom, fused with the soughing haze—-
Shadows yield the slightest of sound, concealed by the foliage dense.
Shifting shadows catch in the mind from sources beyond detect;
Steps take pause to ponder and peer, balanced for briefest poise,
Granting but the hint of a glimpse, just flickers against the depths.
Formless thoughts disperse in the void, meandering overhead;
Flutters indistinct to the sense waft on the air like sighs;
Shadows yield the slightest of sound, concealed by the foliage dense,
Granting but the hint of a glimpse, just flickers against the depths.
Author notes
to learn more about the villanelle: allpoetry.com/Column/784856/all=1
Written August 23rd, 2003
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A contest entry
- Late night thinking by SebeliusTurner.
700 points, ended October 31, 2004, 56 entries
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wow, this is an awesome villanelle. this flows extremely well, and doesn't sound forced at all (which happens to me!) incredibly descriptive, amazing imagery, and just a wonderful job. best of luck in the contest <33
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your rhyme and phrase are always so rich and complex. i am in awe of this level of poetry. you have taken the form to an astounding place. you use varying forms of rhyming that blend perfectly with the content. i always learn from your work and in re reading it i am able to improve my own in some way every time. this is a beautiful array of images. a unique and amazing villanelle.
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I never could write a decent villanelle. I have to say I envy your ability to write one that flows so well. It gives a good feel of a forest at night. I particularly like the third stanza.
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wow, whenever i've attempted villanelles, they end up sounding forced.... you definitely don't have that problem. this is awesome!
rock on!
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This could be Any Forest USA. You know that the creatures of the night are out there, just out of your eye sight. Another beautiful Villenelle.
~ Willow ~
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