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Here in the Dark

 



I’m enveloped by fear

 

Of hollow tomorrows

 

Echoing along bare walls

 

Devoid of dreams.

 


Here in the dark

 


Your heart forgets a beat

 

Silence

 

overwhelms me

 

as I grasp your wrist

 

besieged by vacant nightmares

 


Here in the dark

 


Shadowy demons haunt troubled halls

 

once pulsing with cosmic vigor

 


Spectral desires desert the temple

 

As foreign armies attack

 

Anguish courses through my veins

 

I can’t control my turmoil

 


Here in the dark

 


I strain to see past oblivion

 

Whilst you wander through halcyon dreams

 

Your heart skips a beat

 

And I hold my breath

 


Here in the dark

 




Patricia Gibson-Williams

Author notes

This poem was haunting me last night.  My husband has been having a lot of medical problems.  Right now his blood pressure has been really high, and along with the arrhythmia he’s been having:  I find myself holding his wrist and holding my breath and praying…  in the dark.
Written July 14th, 2004

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  • Man of Harlech silver member
    November 13, 2005
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    Reading this causes me to want to rush foward to be of help but I think that what you are asking is for people to feel what you feel. It is a lonely and vulnerable time and I can feel that. You have communicated well and I wish you the best.


  • Shadowygirl
    July 24, 2004
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    This is scary and breath taking at the same time , wonderful poem , I do hope your hubby is alright , anyhoo back to the poem I love this part the most "Here in the dark


    Your heart forgets a beat

    Silence

    overwhelms me

    as I grasp your wrist

    besieged by vacant nightmares "" that took my breath away lovely work

    Luv April M

    take care


  • Thoughtful Seeker
    July 23, 2004
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    sensational

    sorry to hear that hon,GOD BLESS HIM!! take care,and don't worry,it's gonna be okay!! great poem,made me want to cry,i can't even begin to imagine how worried you must be!! i'll pray for him to get better!! i saw no flaws in this poem,it flowed well,and i felt your anguish,it was quite evident!! keep a hopeful heart!! my prayers are with you both,hugs nbf=night blooming flower


  • sidewinder silver member
    July 18, 2004
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    sometimes those dark visions rise beyond that breath of time ...where you wait in the whispering hope...
    only to find one is still in the wait!
    I can feel your emotions true to your heart!
    keep penning on one stroke at a time!
    Bill


  • Lipstick Trick
    July 14, 2004
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    that is scary. but hold on. things will get better. have faith. this is a great write i love it. do not give up hope.
    ..nikki..


  • LegendaryPoet
    July 14, 2004
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    This language you use in this piece helps it flow incredibly, i absolutely love the way you word each line, not to complicated but not too simple, meaning so much more than it says, the overall mood is dark but it's still fantastic, great job with this piece and thanks for sharing.
    Edited on Jul 14, 10:51 because 'I didn't have time to finish'.


  • Koneko
    July 14, 2004
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    lovely

    oh my gosh...that is so scary. I'm sorry to hear of your husband. I will keep him in my prayers. Hope everything turns out well. I liked your poem as well. It was very rhythmic and was worded well.
    Best wishes for the future...and future poetry,

    -Brittany

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