the field is empty
those who see light or color
prophesies for the rest
day by day the blind would live their lives
immune to everyday troubles
then came to one-eyed man
who taught some to see
and all to despair
for they saw the grime upon their souls for the first time
they proclaimed him their king
and bowed down day and night
a false leader
A misguided mass
from then on only in their dreams was there darkness
for when they woke,
they saw the crimson of the blood they shed for their king
with their waking, dead eyes
they saw the blood
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Written July 13th, 2004
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A very skillful write.
Thought provoking, bordering on the inspired and penned in a craftsmanlike manner. Very nice. -
the world is such a terrible place. many people live in ignorance of the true despair present within their realm of existence. the suffering is far too much to bear. your poem skillfully presents the bliss of a people borne in ignorance of such suffering, then the immense pain and torture they experience upon the realization of what is going on around them. Humanity is such a terrible thing, something often not realized until one grows until adulthood-hence why childhood is so often missed. (you're gonna find a lot of comments from me if all of your poems have this much expression and emotion in them)..as you can see from my poems, i carry some of the same thoughts as you present in your poetry.. keep writing..i'm gonna add you to my favorites.. ~Cursed Attrition
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I love the way things were described. A very thought-provoking piece. Good work!
In Power and Honor,
-Everyones Dead -
Gives you a really odd feeling. Not a bad odd feeling a good one. Its is an incredible peice I've never read anything like this before. Great imagery and nicely written! Well Done
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I really loved the last two lines. The echoed and closing "blood" was very effective. I like the imagery of the first stanza.
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