From the day we are born..
Death awaits.
Waiting like a stalker..
Death awaits.
Watching your every move..
Death awaits.
Consuming your desires,
Living in your fantasies,
darkness,
despair,
no hope,
no peace,
Death awaits...
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Written July 12th, 2004
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The words of this poem, though very few... apart from making one feel close to despair, have quite an amazin reaction... they make one realize that every moment from our 1st conscious breath counts.
the poem itself is very crisp and well put together..
God job...!
LR
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Oh WOW, Why worry so much about death? You'll miss out on living. We all know that we will die someday, but you should never let it take control of your life. Just live and thank God for the life you have. You have such talent, you can tell from your poem that you are a good write, so cheer up and live. God Bless. And keep up the good writing.
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briilient
neat layout really quick but stright to the point
i like how it was stright to the point i think to me it means that there is no side steps when faced with death so good on you . keep up the good work
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Absolutly cool!
In the end we all die, 'tis true.
But I don't think Death is something people should fear.
As J.M. Barrie wrote 'Death will be a great adventure'.
I do hwoever like the way you wrote this.
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interesting perspective on death. i enjoyed reading this piece a great deal. by now i think you deserve an applause lol.
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this was fun.
death how blissful! they say! i know that when i am gone heaven will be hell because everyone that bugs me here will bug me up there. keep writeing loved it... -
Thank you very much for your comment and taking the time to read this. Looks like I have succeeded in giving the reader an eerie feeling as I wanted...
*Ktulu Blackwolfe* -
That background and the anaphora "Death awaits" gives an errie feeling to this poem...A short and nicely written work, without wasting adjectives or adverbs. (difficult to get these days, eh!
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I love the honesty in this poem and I also love how you used the repetitivness with this, it really works to get the point of this piece across, and I really do like it.
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greatness
Yes very true we are born just to die, it seems so unfair, but it's life...Death does definitely wait but for some it strikes to soon for no apparent reason, and it always hurts...I think you expressed your emotion well in this, and this poem was full of a simple truth...great job! and i loved the repetition of death waits...*HUGZ* Thanks for entering it and good luck!
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death, that and taxes are a defo in life, its amazing how those two things can ruin your life! powerful piece babe! l8az sky xxxxx
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very niiiiiiceeeee thats the way we do our poetry and shall keep doing it.
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