And Then She Knew
Upon the hill, stood a castle
beaten and weathered by the years
but something drew her nearer
relinquishing all her fears
Alone she stood in wonder
how she happened upon this place
for she knew not of its existence
before this time and space
But there it was, abandoned
stripped of its glory from the past
with battle scars of wars long gone
a kingdom destined not to last
Then suddenly, to her amazement
the castle commenced coming to life
and like a slow motion movie
played right before her eyes
All the hustle and the bustle
of daily life, from centuries ago
as people walked amongst her
her presence, to them unbeknown
With, both peasants and nobility
amidst the marketplace, as she stood
and there her gaze fell upon
a man, who looked both kind and good
Something haunting drew her closer
his face, she just had to see
for there was something so familiar
she wondered, could it be?
His stature and gentle manner
became apparent to her right away
much resembling a special man
one she'd known in present day
But her heart was torn in pieces
for she knew not if he cared
or if there'd be some future
one that they would someday share
Something always deep within her
told her they were both old souls
traveling through many lifetimes
together, never letting go
Just as these thoughts came to her
a young maiden, held out to this man
through the crowd, they came together
both reaching out their hands
He leaned down to her face
and gave her lips a gentle kiss
there was something special in their love
something she just could not miss
She saw the woman's face
a tear, trickling ever slow
as one appeared upon her own cheek
it was then that she did know
The castle gone from sight now
people, dissipating one by one
she knew there was a reason
why this vision had begun
Now their aparitions fading
into the past, yet once again
her heart was now contented
knowing, her future
.......... was with this man
~PennyLynne~
Author notes
sorry it's a long one LOL..but I think this is more my style, writing stories in poetic form..so, I'm content LOL
To all those who like short reads, thank you for enduring!! LOL 
Written July 12th, 2004
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this is a lovely fantasy write. i am not skilled with writing fantasy but love to read it. and this one is rich in images and emotion. you have wonderful talent for invoking the reader to emotional heights. beautifully written. and i love the ending i was afraid it would be ripped out from under me at the conclusion and was glad to see a revelation instead. excellent.
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one of my favorites
This was such an amazing piece to enjoy!! I was hooked with the very first words, and my heart sped up knowing I had a story to read...hoping for a happy ending that you provided so wonderfully. The rhythm of it was easy and led me along your dream with you. Absolutely fabulous!! -
i like this poem! i like this background! i have this background on one of my poems well enough about me and my background of my poem. i liked reading this poem. this is a well written poem. nicely done . keep up the great-excellent-nice- beautiful work!
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Superb
I read this once before and thought that I had commented but I guess I didn't. At then end I smiled and just sighed. It was so sweet. I just loved it. But then I always love your work.
Big Hugs!
Anna -
It wasn't too long at all, it was written really well Keep up the good work- this one had a great narrative running through it
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well i for one don't find your stories long at all. matter of fact i find myself rather engrossed in them! i enjoyed the slightly fairy tale-ish nature of this one.
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Nice poem, I love the story it tells very vivid.
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A beautiful and enchanting piece you've spun here. It had me so fascinated watching it unfold like a movie in my mind. Kind eyes were staring out at me in the vision. I am thinking this is not purely fantasy inspired...hmmm, I'm thinking I like that thought as well
Outstanding write my friend. 
Much luv and blessings as always, Gypsy
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Excellent Write!
A beautiful masterpiece indeed, I so agree with the many comments above, this is a wonderful write my dear friend...and I'm so glad I stopped in to read you tonight...I miss ya, and hope to see ya around soon!
Much love sweet Penny!
-Timothy/poeticweaver
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MY dear friend, I loved it. It was so well written. Fantastic!!! Your poetry stories of fantasy and spirit always have me begging for more. They are your true calling. They flow and blend together so well. Thanks for sharing another Masterpiece with us. ~Bud~
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to vision the truth in you mind's eye and put it in paper is a great accomplishment.
I hope you continue your long journal writings, for this was is by far a favorite in my book of yours....
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Oh what a wonderful write you have here Penny. It really is, and as for the length--I didn't notice that it is long until you mentioned it. And, you know that I like the shorter reads and write them that way too for the most part. You did a terrific job on this one. Seriously, if you hadn't mentioned that it was a long one I wouldn't have noticed at all--one word just led to the next, and I was through it before I realized that it was long. That my friend is the sign of a great story/poem.
Damon D. Brewer -
Penny...I loved this story. It reminded me of one of my favorite books that I've read many times - and recommend it highly IF you can find it...Anya Seton's GREEN DARKNESS. You did a beautiful job of weaving the tale into rhythm and rhyme. Hats off!
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Ahhhhhhh....a Perfect Penny Poem....whimsical, wonderful and sweet.
Reads like a Barbara Erskine novel, and flows like a story of old that would fit perfectly with a wandering minstrel as he sings his ballads. -
Truly beautiful
Kinda hard to type when you're crying LOL This hit me harder than the everyday romantic fantasy. It reminds me so much of two people I know that belong together, that wants to be together, but can't be
To go back in time where the world was simpler and take that special person with you would be a beautiful journey.
I got so much out of this that I could write a novel LOL Sometimes words fail to express what we feel from a poem and this left me with many thoughts and emotions that fail to come out right now LOL
The concept is so beautiful and romantic. You've done an amazing job on this piece. I pray beautiful visions become a reality in your life
~Kathy
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love it
wow i love it great job...the flow is awesome..hehe
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A wonderfully sweet story....a heartfelt piece...you have done very well here....i enjoyed the read....keep up the good work...thanks for sharing
dark search -
romantic and heartfelt
This was sheer pleasure to read and it captivated my heart so much that I didn't even notice the length. A sure sign of a really good write.
Kindred Souls. A belief of mine. Souls that have been together many times before that somehow manage to find one another again in this life. Simply beautiful and perfectly written with such intense feeling.
Victoria Lin -
Hmmm... interesting concept: to look into the future, look first into the past. It sure is long... but well, it's worth the read.
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I also enjoy the longer poems more than shorter ones. This was absolutely incredible! I loved the storyline and how it ended. I especially liked the last stanza. I don't know why, but that really touched me. This is a very sweet and wonderful poem! Great write!!
~Elizabeth -
enchanting
aww, this was sweet. i like story-type poems, and it wasn't too long. the rhymes are nice and don't sound trite. very good! -
A pleasure to read!
Enjoyed the read, Penny! And I like my stories good and long (as long as they're good)! This was definitely good!
I have one wish for you..May your vision prove to be true!
<3 Maureen
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Great!!
Very good! It rhymes so well and it flows excellently! I really enjoyed reading this poem... its sweet. -
oh don't worry! i usually like short ones, but this was awesome!! i'm usually not a girly girl, but i'm a sucker for cute love stories, and this was definetly a cute love story! mm...i love fantasy too. i could see the old town and everything. hmm...think about if that actually could happen... *ponder* i'm curious to know if i could see me with my boyfriend...that would be awesome haha well sorry i'm kindof rambling! anyways, super write! i loved it! i like this kind of story poetry, it flows quite nicely! keep it up! *~laura~*
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